Date: 07/26/2012 - 02:36 am Title: He's not staying here!
Love the story so far I know that's it been awhile since you started this Fic and I would to hear what happens next
Date: 10/01/2006 - 08:16 am Title: He's not staying here!
Im luvin it update soon
Date: 03/17/2006 - 01:36 am Title: He's not staying here!
I think this is a great story so far and you could definitely do some interesting things with it! Can't wait to read more. Great job!
Date: 02/06/2006 - 10:33 pm Title: He's not staying here!
Love the story , but I think you may have left out some words. Cant wait to read the next part. Dont be too long..
Date: 02/01/2006 - 02:38 pm Title: He's not staying here!
interesting start :)
Date: 02/01/2006 - 05:12 am Title: He's not staying here!
good story so far
Date: 02/01/2006 - 02:10 am Title: He's not staying here!
too hard to read, not in character, and i'm already bored to tears that i couldn't even read the whole thing, this needs a lot of work.
Date: 01/31/2006 - 09:15 pm Title: He's not staying here!
Great chapter! Please update soon!
Date: 01/31/2006 - 09:08 pm Title: He's not staying here!
You might want to put a space between each paragraph and/or set of dialogue so that it's easier to read. Also, there are a lot of punctuation marks that are either missing and should be there or are used incorrectly, especially in dialogue. You might want to get a beta to make sure there are less errors, too.