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Reviewer: kw Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/14/2006 - 06:09 pm Title: 1

Sweet story

Reviewer: Anna Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/06/2006 - 10:23 am Title: 1

I would classify this as extradorinary, sad and hopeful at the same timel as well as thoroughly enjoyable, just not long enough.
I'll look out for more of your fics.


Reviewer: Lynda Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/04/2006 - 06:05 pm Title: 1

I love it. Thank you.

Reviewer: blondiebear Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/04/2006 - 02:05 am Title: 1

great job. loved it.

Reviewer: silly_bint Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/03/2006 - 10:51 pm Title: 1

I loved the way this was written. You have captured an etheral beauty through words concerning Spike and his thoughts. The translation factor does not hinder the story, it makes it better in my opinion. The style is absolutely lovely. Thankyou for writing this.

Reviewer: kit Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/03/2006 - 07:51 pm Title: 1

Beautiful story, you can so feel his despair and wanting to finally end, but Buffy slowly brings him back.

Reviewer: hwesta Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/03/2006 - 05:33 pm Title: 1

I liked your story very much! Keep going :)

Reviewer: Xela Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/03/2006 - 05:02 pm Title: 1

I like your tale, how you weave it.

The only problem is that you have some blatantly misused words, like "but it wasn’t the same life spending juice, witch he needed to survive" "Witch" is the person on a broom stick; which is the word you're looking for. That sentence is also awkward. All of these things a beta could help you out with, and take your writing up to a higher lever.

You have a strong imagination and a solid writing base. :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks. I corrected that stupid mistake. I wrote the story in german to begin with, and then translated it into English. I had a beta reade for this story, she read through my story and corrected most of the mistakes. But since she is a german girl as well, and though she has good knowledge of the English language, she surely couldn't find all the mistakes a native speaker would have found. I asked her to correct the mistakes, but to try and avoid changing the meaning of the sentences. Thus her radius of action was somehwat limited, I think. Have you any knowledge of a beta-reader who would be willing to correct this story further?

Reviewer: wall_flower Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/03/2006 - 05:01 pm Title: 1

Bittersweet, but beautiful. I loved this with a capital L.
Thank God they truly found each other.


Beautiful, thanks for sharing

Reviewer: forever_spuffy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10/03/2006 - 04:40 pm Title: 1

*sniff*
this made me cry.
Good job ;)

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