The story is pretty good. I think throughout, Spike is TOO controlling and volatile, bordering on violent. After what Buffy went through with Angel, it IS believable that she would be inclined to get involved with someone as obviously controlling as Spike, but that doesn't mean that's a good choice for her -- I do like that you didn't make Spike to a total 180 in the end, but in real life, someone like Spike wouldn't have been able to change even that much. Ultimately, he was too "not nice" and not nice guys tend to stay not nice, unless they're getting years of therapy.

You do write the emotions so well, especially the tender parts and the angst and sorrow...you're really good at getting the tears going.

But really, this story needs a really strict editing. Some words make no sense in context, there are a lot of repeated drastic grammar & spelling problems; really made it hard to read at times.

Ok, I'm having trouble with this. I understand that Buffy can love him and be righteously pissed about his attitude, but, since she's sensible enough to get pissed about it, why would she even ASK PERMISSION to have a life? She should be pissed at the thought of even asking if it's OK.

A note: it sounds like you are using "liberal arts degree" as if it's a degree in the arts... it's not; my Political Science degree is a liberal arts degree. See htp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Liberal_arts for more info.

And there are plenty of spelling/grammar errors that are jarring as I read; I've been trying to ignore them, but the last part of this chapter is especially bad (should be: "precautions," "prescription," and "prophylactics," for examples).

And having the doc be "Alexis Denisof" seems kinda creepy, like it's the actual actor guy, not a character.

loved, loved this! this makes this spuffy reader incredibly happy - great storytelling, good characters, realistic problems, happy (but realistically) ending. ironically my favorite parts are when we get to hear jennifer, and her conversations between her and william and her and buffy. great, great story!

great story! And I can't wait to start on the sequel, if there is a sequel :)

OH I loved it.

he really did give it all up for her wonder where they will go as there friends are in Sunnydale, explains why he drove and brought the cat.

OH I wonder what Mommy wants to talk to him about.

Oh what did she want to tell him before she got called away.

Oh so she called him.

I have to say this, Victoria, Canada should have a province behind it, I am assumming you mean British Columbia, but there is more than one Victoria, Canada.

Sorry, just a Canadian who works for a company where we have that mix up everyday.

LOved it

She didn't take her cat, I feel sorry for both of them, and the cat.

Well at least he calmed down some.

but now Buffy thinks the whole pack was like that when it wasn't. Oh Ilike.

Oh I am not seeing the good with Angel out, I wonder what she will tell him to the black