I would agree with people and say that you definitely need a beta if you care about real writing, but then, don't you have one? A beta is there for grammar and spelling errors - when they make suggestions for that, you should take them. If a beta offers extra advice on the story, that's just an added bonus, and should often times be credited. You should probably slow down everything, make transitions for your storyline, because it could actually be decent if you stopped and spent more time on it. Buffy can't be jumping around only doing actions every new line. You need transitions and thought before you submit, and definitely less errors. It also seems you are asking for sympathy reviews when you leave AN's saying that you did not do a good job on the ch - if it isn't for sympathy, then you willingly submit something that you know hasn't been done with your greatest effort. Despite what you may think, this isn't a flame. I hope you take some of our suggestions, and maybe your work will improve because of it.

It's always best to read over your work after you post it, many spelling mistakes can be easily picked up on that way. You can probably find a beta on any fanfic site, if you're still having a lot of trouble other writers will usually put the name of their beta on their work. You should focus more on writing a story and less on trying to write a cheap porn video. You should stick to one tense, probably past tense for you until you get a little more experienced. Smut fics and AU's are harder to write as well, you should practice with some easier stories and wait until you are a more competent writer before trying these sorts of projects.

aww how sad i cant believe therenot getting together and wat about the kid. please let them get together. i love this story and cant wit to read more . please update as soon as u can, cant wait to see wat happens next thanx

Do you only care about are the praises and not the truth on what someone thought on your story/chapter? No matter who the author is, they all make mistakes. No body is perfect. Yet, most of the better established writers in the fandom have at last one beta to read over their chapter to check for spelling/punctuation/grammatical errors. Some even have as many as 5 betas for a story. And most authors like it if someone finds a mistake and points it out to them because they learn from their mistakes. Do you not realize that there is a place to post your author notes at the beginning and not the end of the chapter? Even without the A/N at the end, your latest chapter only had 633 words. I’m not for sure, and you may check with Pari, but I believe there is a 1,000 word minimum per chapter. To me, I read your A/N as you just do not care on the quality of your work. But then again, if you do not care why should anyone else. If it is true that you are deleting the reviews that do not sing your praises than that’s just sad and petty, most people do not read the reviews or let them influence their judgment on if they are going to read a story or not.

Author's Response: Okay first of all Im gonna clear up a few things...Ihave not only deleted the bad reviews I have deleted a few more then that and not all of them were bad I said that now so there is no more to eplain im sorry if you feel that i have only been deleting bad review But its not the truth so go ahead and belive what you want ....thanks for your time.....christina

Your story has the potential to be a good story, but you have several spelling, punctuation and grammatical error through out the story that makes it hard to read. The timeline and plot are not very believable. How would Buffy know that she is pregnant the next day? After how Joyce reacted to the news of Buffy and Angel sleeping together in season 2, I cannot see her happy about this situation because “they are in love” and would allow Buffy to drop out of school and move away. I would suggest finding a beta to help.

Great chapter - I loved it, cause it was so so sweet! Can't wait for more, so please post the next chapter as soon as you can! Take care, C ; )

more soon plz!!!!!!!!!!1

Oh no! Please let Spike get there before Buffy leaves!!! Can't wait for more of this great fic, so please update as soon as you get the chance! Take care, C ; )

aww omg i love it more soon plz!

girl I was ready to reach in and smack you silly, LOL....well I think he'd better drop the first sister first......bad form to write to one of his love and still be living and as been doing the other.....bad spikey......if he's asking her to come to him, he could have least broken up with Dru first.......like if I can't have you'll settle for you sister, LOL....bad bad Spikey....LOL he is a bad rude man.......LOL

i really like this story plz update soon it seems like it is going to be really good later luvs much

Oh Spikey, seems like you have a problem....if she's upset about the makeout session....how will she feel when she realizes you and Dru still the the horizontal mambo.......and I wonder what Dru has up her sleeve......bad rude woman