The story has promise, but you keep sliding back and forth between past tense and present tense.

As the taxi pulled up, Buffy looked back...

Sliding into the back of the taxi, she tells the driver...

It is very distracting.

How sad...

Cool start, looks like this may be intriguing. Just a note though, you have a few typos where you are confusing "where" and "were" for example,

It had been enough, they where in love and nobody looking at the two of them then could ever have guessed that this would be their fate.

and

Too many memories where between those walls and she hated that a few actions could change all that, their little family was splitting and she is unsure how to fix it, if that is even possible.

I'm not trying to be hurtful but since this is your first Spuffy fic I just want to make you aware that this detracts from your story, especially since the plot has gotten off to such a promising start. I'd hate to see it plagued by typos. I look forward to what you have in store for us.


Author's Response: Please, if you see it, pull me up. I stopped writing 3 years ago and this is my first time back :) I would much prefer you tell me problems, so that I can sort them out.