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Date: 08/18/2014 - 03:32 am Title: Those 19 Days

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Date: 11/19/2013 - 08:53 pm Title: Those 19 Days

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Reviewer: lizzie Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/30/2010 - 05:17 pm Title: Hell Bound (Part 2)

loved it. looking forward to chapter 7:-)

Author's Response: Thank you. Next chapter will be fluffy. Not really my cup of tea but I'm hoping I did justice to the characters.

Reviewer: curly_kitty Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/19/2010 - 06:59 pm Title: Hell Bound (Part 1)

Wow, this story is awesome and I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thanks. Please keep reviewing.

Reviewer: magnus374 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/19/2010 - 12:52 pm Title: Hell Bound (Part 1)

Good a new chapter.

Author's Response: Another one in the next few minutes.

Reviewer: All4Spike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/19/2010 - 11:40 am Title: Hell Bound (Part 1)

The only problem in using dialogue from the episode is that the vast majority of your readers will be almost as familiar with Ats as with BtVS. Reading through scenes they already know will become boring. Personally, I tend to skim through those parts and so risk missing the original sections. I'd much rather read just the 'added scenes' with only as much reference tot he scenes from the show as required to keep the story flowing.

Oh, and it is not plagiarism if you add an Author's Note explaining that you've used dialogue from an episode and credit the writer of that episode.

Author's Response: Thanks for letting me know. I've been struggling with figuring out how to write those scenes without plagarising. I got some feedback from people who watched BtVS but not Ats and couldn't figure out some parts of the story. Maybe I should put credits + episode summary in my A/N?

Reviewer: Pam S Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/07/2010 - 12:43 pm Title: Unleashed

Poor Spike.. Buffy is there and is still a ghost.. enjoyed

Reviewer: All4Spike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/07/2010 - 11:14 am Title: Unleashed

Not too may errors, just a few wandering tenses. I like the way you're weaving Buffy & Dawn into the events of Ats season 5, but surprised that Spike isn't making more of an effort to get close to Buffy. IMHO his competitiveness with Angel would have made him try to influence her towards him even if he did think she was trying to get back with Angel. Sorry, can't help with the next chapter, only you know where you want the story to go...

Author's Response: Thanks. I know I must have made some grammar mistakes. English is not my 1st language. I apologize for that.

As for Spike, he is in an inner turmoil right now. He still has his soul. And he is not in a strong position to approach her right now (being ghost). After seeing her with Angel, he feels insecure especially since Buffy hasn't mentioned what she said to him in the cave.

For the next chapter, I am worried about plagarism. Because those who saw Angel season 5 may be able to follow the storyline but those who didn't will get confused about what is happening unless I write the same scenes from the episode. I want it to be authentic like so I don't want to change the dialogues. That's why I'm confused on how to proceed.

Please keep reviewing.

Reviewer: All4Spike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/07/2010 - 11:00 am Title: Just Rewards (Part 2)

Typical misunderstandings. It wouldn't be Spuffy if they didn't get crossed wires occasionally, they're both so insecure! Nice twist on the Hainsley episode, and typical Angel, trying to keep Buffy & Spike from each other. Chapter's a nice length, I find very short chapters very unsatisfying.

Author's Response: Thanks. I agree short chapters are unsatisfying. I'm looking forward to your review of the next chapter. And any advice about how to present the one after that would be appreciated.

Reviewer: All4Spike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/07/2010 - 10:51 am Title: Just Rewards (Part 1)

Very nice 'setup' for the first meeting of Buffy & GhostySpike. Enough info about what everyone is up to for us to figure out where we are in the timeline while still concentrating on the Spuffy relationship. Glad to see Buffy's uneasy about the W&H situation.

Reviewer: PaganBaby Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/30/2009 - 01:38 am Title: Just Rewards (Part 2)

It was good to see Buffy telling Angel off, that Spike was important to her :) But I wish she hadn't upset Spike by asking to speak to Angel alone - d'oh! The misunderstanding is very Spike and Buffy lol

I liked all the original content you had in the chapter, good job!

*smooch*

Reviewer: Andy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2009 - 10:30 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 2)

It's coming along very nicely. eager for more

Reviewer: mazza Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2009 - 10:19 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 2)

I like this so far, you have inserted Buffy and crew well, the chapters are not tool long at all, good work.

Reviewer: Mary Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2009 - 09:04 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 2)

Looks good.

Reviewer: PaganBaby Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/24/2009 - 04:55 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 1)

I really liked the changes you made. Lots of original character interactions and thoughts done around the plot of the episode - exactly what I wanted and was hoping to see :D I think you did a great job with it, I'll be watching for the next update!

*smooch*

Author's Response: Thanks PB. This is what I intended only it came out wrong last time around. Hopefully this time it will work well.

Reviewer: CallMeKitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/24/2009 - 03:46 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 1)

so much better. Gone are the scripts, and replaced with what we didnt see, plus your added twist of Buffy being there. Well done and I look forward to the next installment

Author's Response: Thanks kitten. I am glad you like it. I guess I redeemed myself by doing it right this time around. :) Keep reviewing.

Reviewer: Andy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/24/2009 - 03:21 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 1)

Hmm - I wonder why Angel didn't mention the fact to Buffy that Spike was back....well no prizes there! Good dialogue between Wes and Buffy too. I'm a bit surprised at Dawn's willing acceptance of Spike as she never really made it up with him - but hey, your story!! Can't wait to see where you're taking this. I will read it from now on

Author's Response: Angel always meddles in Buffy's life for her benefit in his opinion. Dawn was angry with Spike in Season 7 because of Xander telling her about the rape deal. But after his death, she was upset about not patching things. They never had a conversation with each other since 2nd episode in Season 7.

Don't worry. Dawn will have her conversation with Spike soon.

Reviewer: Andy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/23/2009 - 11:55 pm Title: Those 19 Days

Well, having never really watched Angel because i can't stand him as a character, so i'll gloss over the bits about him! But the Buffy/Willow dialogue was excellent. I'm glad you picked to emphasise that Spike had nothing to gain by looking after Dawn, except he was just keeping a promise to a woman whom he loved - obviously not scoring any brownie points from anyone for doing it either. And i also like how it made Willow think too. I wil continue to read this as i'd like to see where it goes!

Author's Response: Hey Andy,

Angel as himself in his show was ok. He was brooding a lot but it was his show. I preferred him away from Buffy's show than in Buffy. He was very annoying in Buffy for me.

Reason for me focusing on Season 5 was because of Spike's return from Hellmouth. I wanted Buffy to be there so I am writing this story. If you would like, I would be happy to put episode Summary so that you won't get confused as the story is written as inbetween scenes in the episodes. Atleast that's how it is for now.

Thanks for the review. I hope you will read on and keep commenting. Will update soon.

Reviewer: xaphania Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/23/2009 - 11:54 pm Title: Just Rewards (Part 1)

Interesting conversation with Wes, and I liked Buffy's inner-thoughts at the end of the chapter. Keep it up :)

Reviewer: xaphania Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/23/2009 - 08:14 pm Title: Those 19 Days

Definitely an interesting start, and I enjoyed Willow and Buffy's conversation. She needs someone to talk to.

Reviewer: immortalangel08 Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/22/2009 - 09:54 pm Title: Those 19 Days

Looks good can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: All4Spike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/03/2009 - 12:40 pm Title: Those 19 Days

I downloaded the first 3 chapters, came to review and now there's only 1 chapter? Colour me puzzled. Anyway... I love where you're going with this. Buffy needs to get her act in gear and tell Spike she still loves him and isn't intending to get back with Angel! One small criticism... you appear to be using a lot of dialogue from the show. I'd prefer it if you minimised this (we all know what happened!) and just filled in the bits between except for the parts where it's radically changed by Buffy's or Dawn's presence... but that's just my own view. Feel free to ignore me.

Author's Response: Hi,

Like you, others felt the same way that I have used a lot of dialogues from the show. I thought it would be ok because I wanted to integrate the characters to the show. But I was wrong. So now I am rewriting chapters 2 and 3 again. Once finished, it will be as you suggested, I will upload in the next 2 days. Please kindly review the chapters after that.

Reviewer: Spikelissa Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2009 - 02:36 am Title: Those 19 Days

Okay - here is my review...Domdomdom...I'm trying to go for effect - not working huh?

Anyway, let me get to the point. I am very analytical. What Jake might see well I take it a tad further. I read into it and also look at what just happened throughout the season 7. One I will tell you that it would be nice that Willow and Buffy had this much of an in depth convo in the show, but the sort of did albeit more accusative though. "Her why does everyone still think I'm in love with Spike" However you took it in depth which is good. However, I'm not feeling your Willow. She wasn't this closed minded to Spike. She was on the trip of acceptance that Xander was embarking on. She definitely wasn't on the up and up of Giles. But given that it is your story...I'm going with it.

Yes you do need a beta. I will be honest about that. But, and that is a big but you did very well considering. It was brave to post this and see how it did without the beta. There were places I felt there shouldn't be some sentences. Especially with the Angel part and not sensing the newly called Slayers from the spell on the Scythe. It felt like you the author was giving the reader an explanation.

I like that you gave Buffy that time to come to an epiphany of what Spike truly meant to her. It was a real realization rather than feelings for demise as some thank you to her and mankind. That was really good of you to point that out. What I didn't like was her listening to Willow on advice on how it is to lose someone you care for. They still might be friends and so on but the difference between their 'love' relationships were on a completely different level. I would have said what the hell do you know? You were truly in a good place with the woman you loved and then lost her! I had a few days to work past all the hurt between us. Then OMG then you tell me to try to get back with my ex...Uh this sounds like a Willow still pushing Buffy to do something she wants her to do rather than letting Buffy grieve. That sounds like Willow, but what didn't sound Willowish was the pushing of accepting and thinking Angel changed when they had heaps loads of history and then to top it all off saying it was possibly her destiny? Ok that part could be right but it sounded to me like WIllow was Angel matchmaking like she did with Riley. Ugh that infuriates me!

Now see ask Callmekitten - I analyze everything to bits!!!! It's by no means to be harsh but it is to help you dig deeper and me the reader to get angsty to then feeling tons of joy for the awesome ending of Spuffy! I am also a bit leery of the Angel/Buffy possible theme. Not my thing like most human stories aren't either, but I usually bear it. I read some but I come to Spuffy land for the supernatural and yumminess of those two or maybe Spuffy and Tara or Anya...But Angel bleh ewwww and god I would take even Dru over Angel...Please don't go that route! Cuz you will lose me...I'm getting asked to read a story featuring Angel Buffy and Spike - I just shudder...I think the closest I accept them is if it's in the form of Angelus. Angel is a lie to me. Ok done ranting but in all fairness this was a fab start! A few mistakes and author explaining, but overall good. Make sure you stay in characterization. I know you can change them to fit your story, but keep in mind you just came from Season 7 Willow wasn't in the band of not accepting of Spike and she new darn well Spike was of the soul variety. Hmmmm. Going on to read the next but know this I will not lie and give you a full head on review. But if I don't always review straight away it's cuz I either put it up on word or printed it out so I could read...I so read at work lol.

So it's a heads up my reviews tend to be lengthy and really get to the heart of the story! I hope this wasn't taken the wrong way! Good story.

Author's Response: Hi Lissa,

It is good if you are analytical. I want to know my mistakes so that I can improve on. Please share your opinion freely.

As for Willow and Buffy, Willow does not know the depth of Buffy's relationship with Spike. She was going dark in Season 6 and Buffy didn't confess to anyone about her feelings in Season 7. Willow do know Buffy had more than friendly feelings but her awareness was more about Buffy's relationship with Angel. So now that Spike is dead and Buffy is not loaded with responsibilities, she wants Buffy to move on. In her eyes, Angel is the one Buffy had always been in love with and she is preventing her friend from grieving and make her move on. In summary, Willow is trying to fix things for Buffy.

I am not a fan of Angel/Buffy either but for angsty purposes, I might create scenes where it may appear it is Angel/Buffy. But I can assure you that nothing concrete will happen. Atleast not between Angel and Buffy. ;)

Please keep reviewing. Your honest review helps me assess myself. I got myself a good beta now (Xaph) and I have updated the chapters.

Reviewer: Jake Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/29/2009 - 06:16 pm Title: Those 19 Days

Good start, looking forward to more.

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Date: 01/09/2009 - 07:55 am Title: Those 19 Days

Cool idea for a story! Wish I'd thought of it first! lol I really liked the convo between Buffy and Willow. It's a shame that we didn't get something like that on the show *sigh*

Author's Response: Thanks PB. I hope I can keep up to your expectations in my next chapters.

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