How did she get pregnant? Spike. vampire!

This was a wonderful story that I personally would love to see continue. ~ZLB

Typical Americans - the most important thing after food & basic shelter is - a television! Problem sentence: "Dalton & her shared a room" No,no,no. "She and Dalton shared a room" The ways you can tell which to use are
#1 Is the person performing an action or is something being done To the individual? "She went to the store". He took her to the store".
#2 .If two person-words are in a sentence, leave one name out and see how it sounds then. Which sounds better "Her shared a room" or "She shared a room"?
It was funny, that even while being afraid for her life, Buffy was concerned about how big a mess she might make, fighting six vampires! I would be, too, altho since I'm not a Slayer, the "mess" I would have to clean up would be caused by panic.
Oh, is Dalton making a mistake, not checking Buffy carefully for wounds? Or is he doing the only safe thing, because what if Spike found out and misunderstood and got all "Grrr"?

Author's Response: Ahh, I'll have to fix that. Thanks. I think he's afraid to Spike and his grring nature heh. I'm thinking I would be too actually.

I think it is interesting how you show us a truly "pouncy" Angelus, more interested in his goal of world domination, than in sex or mayhem. You are developing Darla well - she seems very "vampiric" if I may say so. More interested in the "now", yet willing to go along with Angelus because - he's the Alpha, right?
PROBLEM SENTENCE: "She wasn't fond of the idea of hell on earth, but she figured food would still be a readily source and people could still be tortured so she went along with the idea". It would be better as "she figured food would be readily available & there'd be plenty of people to torture..."

Author's Response: I'll have to look at that sentence. You have a very good point. I had fun developing Darla. I kind of wish I could have done more with her. Some story I write I'll have to add her in as a vampire and really see if I can have some fun with her.

I was going to say I don't much like Joyce the way you've portrayed her, but I changed my mind during the chapter. I guess Mom was just tired from her trip and probably also suffering repressed guilt for leaving her daughter alone so much. Teenagers may not need their parents to DO a lot for them, but they still need them to be, well, to be AVAILABLE. Really excited thinking about how Willow & Xander will react.


Author's Response: Well I put her as a busy parent. I was planning to kind of fix things with her a bit and have her be a bit more active in the sequel if I ever can pull it off the way I planned. I wanted a family structure not just a fiction based on two people as it was done this time with two others who popped in. I wanted an enlarged family structure that included a little bit of each of their lives allowing the characters to develop over time to be who they should be. To do that it's taking A LOT more than I planned. SO it might be a while for a sequel but I can see your point about Joyce.

Great idea, having Dalton choose clean necks to bite.
Ale, spelled a-l-e is a drink similar to beer. To be sick is to ail. They are pronounced exactly the same.
And people wonder why so many immigrants don't speak English! It's a confusing language, more so all the time.

Author's Response: Ok, I'll fix it up and I agree. No wonder people even complain about having to learn English!

*giggle* You mis-spelled his flat stomach as his FAT stomach! LMAO! (line eleven) When I finally pulled myself together and I read the next few lines, I thout, what a great question! I mean, really, what WOULD cold cum taste/feel like as opposed to ...er...the regular stuff? And Spike is a smoker. That might affect the taste. But, on the other hand, the strawberries and syrup MIGHT counter-act that. Cinnamon in one's diet does. How do I know? oH, i MUST HAVE LEARNED THAT AT COLLEGE. ; D

Author's Response: *laughs* wow that's a bad typo. Thanks for pointing that out! lol on the rest of your comments.

Does Dick Clark know that he is NOT the oldest living teen-ager by several decades. Oi! What that stuff they are eating would do to my innards.

Author's Response: lol! I know!

Sounds like Buffy isn't going to waste TOO much time meeting her new friend - even tho he may seem like a fiend, instead. : D

Author's Response: *laughs* yea I don't know if I would call him a friend.

My interest is definitely peaked. Especially since your A/N makes me think Angel isn't a love interest. Never did like the broody boy.

Author's Response: Yea no love interest for Angel this time around. This story is pretty much completely AU. I kept the vampires, vampires, humans are humans still but I threw them into a different plot to see how things would turn out if things had been different. Hope you enjoy it!

So far I've liked this story very much. But you really need a beta, there are too much mistakes.

Author's Response: I'm trying a new beta. It's my fourth one! Anyway hopefully this one works out. She's supposed to be looking over things on Wednesday so I"ll be posting more on the story on Wednesday hopefully. Sorry!

Awe :))
Enjoyed the read - and would love to read the sequel as well.

Author's Response: I've started a sequel. It's going slow but I"m thinking it will go fast once I really get going on the plot. Just a lot of things to work with and a lot of people I want to explore but definitely will follow soon! I got another two fics I'm almost finished and I want to finish those before I submerge myself into the sequel too much.