Wow. It's finally, finally over. It was a great story. There's just a tiny problem I have with it and most of your other stories (It's not really a big deal and you can ignore this criticism if you like). You tend to overuse the -- symbol a lot. Most of the time, when you use it, it can be replaced by a comma or a period. In dialogue, overuse of the dash makes the speaker sound like their stammering. Maybe that's what you were going for, but it just seemed like they were stammering all the time. That part's not really a big deal, though, but the -- was also used throughout the non-speaking parts and THAT kind of breaks up the flow of the paragraph. As I said, it doesn't really matter and feel free to ignore this,... it was just something I noticed that kind of bothered me. But it was a GREAT story and I really enjoyed it.

What a great ending for this fantastic story... congrats!