Date: 08/19/2011 - 11:47 pm Title: Chapter One
still a bit open
Date: 10/16/2005 - 02:27 pm Title: Chapter One
Yep - first chapter was good.
Date: 10/07/2005 - 06:15 pm Title: Chapter One
More more more more ... {grins} Look forward to your next update.
Date: 10/07/2005 - 01:10 pm Title: Chapter One
hey great start look forward to more..it didn't bother me at all about Buffy *69 back to LA..it's just a story of fantasy and creativity..i never would have caught that if someone hadn't pointed it out..but in the end it's your beautiful masterpiece and as its author you have the right to be as creative as you want...update soon...N
Date: 10/07/2005 - 01:40 am Title: Chapter One
It's an interesting start, but one thing REALLY stood out. You can't *69 in Rome and get a number in LA. That's just impossible. International calling doesn't work like local calling... You should probably figure out something else to do--maybe Buffy's got some kind of other way to track calls. Because as it stands, that's a glaring error...