Honestly, the *69 thing caught my attention, too. And it made me almost stop reading the fic. Why? Because something like that makes me doubt how good the fic is going to be. Makes the author look uniformed, and it just...stands out. And the "it's fiction" argument really doesn't fly. Yeah, it is, but that doesn't mean the writer can be lazy. Fiction doesn't mean you can just write whatever the heck you want and say "la de da, it's fiction, I don't have to care." No. That isn't the way it works. Professionally published novels are "fiction," but no publishing house in the world would let a writer get away with that. I'm not saying that you have to have professional quality work, but an attitude of "oh, I didn't know so I just put it in cause it's fiction" doesn't say a lot for how much you care about your work. Being a writer means putting forth the best story you can for your readers, and just slapping something in that's completely impossible because it's "fiction" is lazy. Why should I take the time to read your story if you can't take the time to put enough effort to use a plot device that works? I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just trying to give some advice. Not all writers will be turned off by something like that, but a lot will. Your first chapter has to grip people and let them know why they need to keep reading. If something in the first chapter makes the author seem like they don't know what they're talking about, people are going to not read. So don't just take the easy way out and put in any old thing and call it "fiction." There's fiction and there's laziness. Do research. Ask other writers for advice. Take the time to come up with something that works. Your story will be better because of it.

Look forward to the next update. Nice building towards the changes by having Wes there to hopefully keep Wes from getting killed. Also I'm glad that Buffy told ANgel there was no way she wasn't going with Spike. {smiles} I liked the kiss first then the slap. Takes care of both sides of how Buffy must be feeling right now.