Reviews For Torn Between Loves
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Reviewer: samantha Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/13/2006 - 08:29 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

go hill! and go buffy! haha.

Reviewer: Meagan Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2006 - 04:00 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

I know this really happened to the author and its a very brave thing to do, but people are commenting on the story, and while it reflets actual events, she shouldn't take it too personally. I know that sounds ridiculous, but no one is out to hurt her personally.

Plus, she is sending this story out into the wide open net. People are going to respond to this story and especially this Buffy, if she didn't want to hear truthful responses then she shouldn't have posted this story.



Author's Response: Everyone, I just want to start by saying thank you for all of the reviews. Samantha (the person that sent the reviews and knows me), was saying that the people that were saying the story has no plot needs to remember that it is a true story. To all of the other people that comment negatively on it, I don't care because their reviews are of great help to me, and helps me to construct the next chapter. I don't care if people tell me that Buffy is wrong in not choosing right now, because that's how I was and I realize that now. At the time, however, it was different. Readers, please try to put yourself in Buffy's shoes, and realized the difficutly of this situation. Thank you, and please send more reviews, and keep reading. Dustatdawn08

Reviewer: Mac 1 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 11:29 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

And the later chapters with more paragraph breaks are much better, but you are still combining dialogue within one paragraph. In fiction, every time a character speaks, it must be in it's own paragraph. You cannot have two characters' dialogue in one paragraph. It is not only bad form but is confusing to the reader, as movement, gesture, emotion - all of it - become mixed together and it is difficult to know which character did or thought or gestured what. This story is still very early in it's writing so it is not unreasonable to go back and re-format the paragraphs from the beginning so that they read properly and then continue on correctly. If you don't do this you are consigning all your hard work to being dismissed as poorly written and not worth bothering with overall. I don't think you want that and I don't think your story deserves that either. Thanks.

Reviewer: Mac 1 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 11:21 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

Seriously, go back and re do the chapters so that they are in paragraph form. It is like pulling teeth to read this story in its current format. Do not take this feedback lightly - we are all telling you this for your own benefit. Why go to all the trouble of writing a story that people can barely read just because the formatting is so problematic?

Reviewer: Mariana Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 12:09 am Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

really interesting beginning...though i recommend you separate the story in more paragraph cos it looks too crowded... but other than that great story so far!! thanx so much! hope you update soon!

Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 10:33 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

great so far

Reviewer: Brat Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 10:27 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

Good start! :) Just a note that you might want to break up the dialogue and paragraphs. Makes for an easier read. Will we get flashbacks of Spike's big reveal of feelings to Buffy?

Reviewer: MarstersGirl13 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 10:18 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

good start. just wondering..i may have missed it but how old is buffy and the gang??? hoping for more soon!

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 09:49 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

Great chapter! I'm starting to feel sorry for Spike already. Please update soon!

Reviewer: Meagan Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 09:48 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

Good start, I like how you started with the "big reveal" already done, so we can see where they go from there. Can't wait for more.

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