Your story is hard to follow. When you write dialogue you write another person's actions after one person's dialogue and it is confusing. A general rule of writing is if you have dialogue for a person, only that person's actions should follow in the same paragraph. Another person's actions should be in a brand new paragraph. Something to consider. You also use ; a lot. That punctuation is normally seen in essay style writing, not stories. If you feel the need to use it try a . or , instead and re-word if necessary.