Date: 07/10/2007 - 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great start! :)
Author's Response: thank you
Date: 07/02/2007 - 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is an interesting premise, but... you need some help in your writing. No offense, but this style is rather difficult to read. There is no flow, no emotion, there is no sympathy for characters, everything sounds forced and fake.
PLEASE look for a beta that can help you with content as well as grammar/spelling. This story has a lot of promise, but it needs a lot of help.
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Date: 07/02/2007 - 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow...just saw this. William seems a lil grumpy and such. Much different than what I'm used to for his character. I have a feeling this'll get really interesting!
Author's Response: Not grumpy, He is the boss, so ordering is what he does, he also doesn't put up with nosense.
Date: 06/27/2007 - 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting start, can't wait to read more of this! :)
Author's Response: Thanks more should come soon.
Date: 06/27/2007 - 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Loved it, can't wait to see where you're going with this! Please update soon :)
Author's Response: More should come soon.
Date: 06/26/2007 - 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great beginning! Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thanks
Date: 06/26/2007 - 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like the start; looking forward to what you'll write :)
Author's Response: Thanks
Date: 06/26/2007 - 06:59 am Title: Chapter 1
really interesting start, loved it. looking forward to more
Author's Response: Thanks more should be soon.
Date: 06/26/2007 - 12:57 am Title: Chapter 1
I like it so far; interesting premise. It might be easier to write in past tense than present tense. I don't think an 28 year old and an 18 year old is statutory rape; I know in the states, at least, the age of consent borders from 16-18. Looking forward to more. :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice.
Date: 06/25/2007 - 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
i like it so far. but why do writers always make spike the older one? i love older buffy and having spike as her boy toy. haha...
but i look forward on reading more of this. keep up the wonderful work.
Author's Response: I gues we do it because he is older, he was over 100 when he was with Buffy so hence the old guy younger girl.
So if you were to read a young Spike older Buffy what ages are you thinking of.
Date: 06/25/2007 - 10:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh how cute this fic is soo far
please keep up the good work
waiting for more
Author's Response: Thanks
Date: 06/25/2007 - 09:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw Honey the proof reading was nothing and it shows I'm no beta because I see something I missed ....But this is a good story please carry on with it....~Jeanette~
Author's Response: Yeah I know I need a beta, but can't seem to have luck with them.