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Reviewer: Ariadne Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 07/10/2007 - 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 1

Great start! :)

Author's Response: thank you

Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/02/2007 - 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is an interesting premise, but... you need some help in your writing. No offense, but this style is rather difficult to read. There is no flow, no emotion, there is no sympathy for characters, everything sounds forced and fake.

PLEASE look for a beta that can help you with content as well as grammar/spelling. This story has a lot of promise, but it needs a lot of help.

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Reviewer: secretguest Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07/02/2007 - 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow...just saw this. William seems a lil grumpy and such. Much different than what I'm used to for his character. I have a feeling this'll get really interesting!

Author's Response: Not grumpy, He is the boss, so ordering is what he does, he also doesn't put up with nosense.

Reviewer: Pet Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/27/2007 - 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very interesting start, can't wait to read more of this! :)

Author's Response: Thanks more should come soon.

Reviewer: Cissi Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/27/2007 - 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 1

Loved it, can't wait to see where you're going with this! Please update soon :)

Author's Response: More should come soon.

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/26/2007 - 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1

Great beginning! Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/26/2007 - 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1

I like the start; looking forward to what you'll write :)

Author's Response: Thanks

Reviewer: jamies_lady Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/26/2007 - 06:59 am Title: Chapter 1

really interesting start, loved it. looking forward to more

Author's Response: Thanks more should be soon.

Reviewer: TestaALT Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/26/2007 - 12:57 am Title: Chapter 1

I like it so far; interesting premise. It might be easier to write in past tense than present tense. I don't think an 28 year old and an 18 year old is statutory rape; I know in the states, at least, the age of consent borders from 16-18. Looking forward to more. :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the advice.

Reviewer: penny Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2007 - 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 1

i like it so far. but why do writers always make spike the older one? i love older buffy and having spike as her boy toy. haha...

but i look forward on reading more of this. keep up the wonderful work.

Author's Response: I gues we do it because he is older, he was over 100 when he was with Buffy so hence the old guy younger girl. So if you were to read a young Spike older Buffy what ages are you thinking of.

Reviewer: melb Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2007 - 10:22 pm Title: Chapter 1

oh how cute this fic is soo far


please keep up the good work

waiting for more

Author's Response: Thanks

Reviewer: Spikes mrs Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2007 - 09:22 pm Title: Chapter 1

Aw Honey the proof reading was nothing and it shows I'm no beta because I see something I missed ....But this is a good story please carry on with it....~Jeanette~

Author's Response: Yeah I know I need a beta, but can't seem to have luck with them.

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