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Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/18/2008 - 09:18 pm Title: Party's Over

Darn... such a good start for them both and then Riley is at the door. Well now Buffy can tell him it's over.
~ What she did... but it didn't end so well *sigh*
Hopefully Buffy can convince him that she really loves him.

Author's Response: Ah we'll have to wait and see now, won't we?? lol Thanks for your review!!

Reviewer: MidnightGirl Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/16/2008 - 04:16 am Title: Party's Over

It's so sad that things took such an angsty turn for Spike and Buffy. :( Can't wait to see where things go from here. Good updates!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review, hun!

Reviewer: RedSnake Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/16/2008 - 03:56 am Title: Party's Over

This story is so good. I read chp 1-16 in one sitting. I had stuff to do but I couldn't take myself away from the computer. I can't wait to read what happens next.

Author's Response: Haha awww you just made my day!! I'm sorry if I inturrupted your plans hehe but I'm really glad that I did!! Thanks for your review, hun!!

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/16/2008 - 12:02 am Title: Party's Over

Damn that Riley! More please!

Author's Response: Hehe thanks for your review!!!

Reviewer: lacey Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/15/2008 - 09:10 pm Title: Party's Over

okay, i don't get it, why was he so upset? how did she break his heart? if anything, i thought she would be pissed because he knew about riley cheating and never said anything, he has no reason to be upset. buffy did break up with riley, whether she said they were on a break or not, that was still a break up, and spike should have known that she wouldn't have gone back to him. i feel like the angst was just forced in this chapter, it doesn't seem like it really belonged, but maybe that's just me.

Author's Response: Well, this chapter was loosely based on something that happened to me a while back. With Spikes point of view, I was just trying to convey the dissapointment of having her lie to him even after he thought he had gotten her to basically change her ways. Perhaps I should consider re-wording to get the point across. And with the whole break/break up thing... where I live a break doesnt mean the same thing as breaking up. A break would just be like 'we need to stop spending so much time together or we'll get sick of each other, but you're still my boyfriend.' Sorry if I confuse you. Hopefully you'll enjoy the rest of the story. =)

Reviewer: ShortStuff Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/15/2008 - 07:57 pm Title: Party's Over

This story is pretty good but you need a beta.

Just a couple of examples:

strait = a sea which connects two areas of land
the word you're looking for is straight

bullocks = young male cows
the word you're looking for is bollocks

It's a shame because it's putting me off reading any more. I think you are a talented writer and this is an interesting story so please take this as the constructive criticism that it's meant to be.



Author's Response: I appreciate your advice on everything and I just want you to know, I do have my own beta. She helps me a lot with my mistakes but not every one is noticed all the time. I think its unfortunate that little things like the word strait/straight are going to keep you from reading a story you supposedly like.

Reviewer: Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09/15/2008 - 07:28 pm Title: Party's Over

That was really a heart breaking chapter. Although, I agree with Spike. Buffy should have told Spike the truth instead of saying that they broke up for good. I feel bad for Spike especially reading the line "you broke my heart Buffy" That made me cry. But I feel bad for Buffy too. She loves him so much. She was planning on ending it with Riley for good when he came back. My heart breaks for them both. I wonder how Buffy is going to get her Spike back. :)
But I was happy to see Riley get hit a few times. He deserves it so.

Author's Response: Everyone likes to see Riley get hit hehe... yes, I too am on Spikes side (in this chapter anyway) and he really got his feelings hurt in this one. Thanks for your review hun!!

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