Is incestual a typo? Couldn't find the word with my translator. It wouldn't hurt if you let a beta check the chapters too for typos (wrong words = where/wear, black market / black marker etc.); it's hard so see them yourself. I notice that with my reviews too.

What a mess for Buffy, having her mother's boyfriends / future husband hunting after her. I was a bit weary if she would make it, being only fourteen but she isn't dumb. She was really lucky, saving all the money and to run into William. But it left me wondering if he got her pregnant.
William forgot about his girlfriend though. How will he keep Buffy when he has already a girlfriend? Can't say I like this part (xx/other) (I mostly don't) but I like the story so far.
And that Joyce wasn't looking for Buffy? Makes me wonder what happened to her - 'brainwashed' by Hank?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. You're my first reviewer *smiles* I'm new as a writer so until you mentioned it, I wasn't even aware of the ability to just click on a link to get a beta reader. I'll look into that and about the word incestual, I don' think it is a word. I'll have to rewrite that. Sorry! Yea, Buffy is in a mess. Quite the little pickle but she is very smart and resourceful and since her mother and her grew up without much money, she was taught at a very young age how to save and budget and it's definitely paying off at this point of her life. Plus luck is definitely on her side in most ways. As for the part about William's girlfriend, I actually had thought about that a bit and had it explained more in a much later chapter but to say a bit now, it's not much of a relationship between his current girlfriend and him. I'm thinking even now, girlfriend was the wrong word to use, but his buddies seem to think of her as that. But yea that is touched upon later in the story I promise. And the deal with Joyce and her lack of searching for Buffy, I just added that into a later chapter. I honestly hadn't given much thought as to why Joyce wouldn't look for her daughter. I just sort of originally had planned to ignore it but I think you're right in wondering why. So thanks to your review, I added a little bit of an explanation about it as to cure the curious minds. And the parts with xx/others, I couldn't find another way to create the angst I wanted in the story. I wanted a reason for the departures and the re-meetings. So I do apologize for them, but I felt they were necessary to keep the plot flowing. Spike and his girlfriend won't ever be seen and will only be discussed in terms of plot. Buffy and other are visited and discussed but important to help William build his character as you will see later on. As I said earlier, thanks for the review!