Date: 07/29/2009 - 01:21 am Title: Chapter 35: Watcher's Assistance & Chapter 36: Trouble
In the paragraph that begins GILES FROWNED AND GOT UP AND TOOK...you say ANGELUS WAS A WOMANIZER AND A DRUNK, NOT JUST A PLEASANT. I'm sure you meant to say he wasn't a peasant. It might be easier to understand as "It's true that Angeluswas a womanizer and a drunk, but he wan't a peasant" Another thing that is not so great is Giles' use of the vernacular. You should make him sound more like a wanker. Oh! I meant to say, he should sound more educated and British.
Author's Response: LOL. I didn't really develop much of Giles. I didn't really focus on him and in fact kind of had him popping in more like a fixture outside of her life but yea I should have gone more into the British part of him instead of having him speak so plain English. Good suggestion!
Date: 03/01/2009 - 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 35: Watcher's Assistance & Chapter 36: Trouble
So it was Riley, Darla'a new toy; I wondered.
Angelus was never good with thinking that raising hell on earth could kill the human = no food.
Author's Response: I know! Darla seemed to think it was an ok idea as well but was at least nervous about food. Angelus just was focused on doing something no one else had done. Silly vamp. Just wait until he starves!
Date: 02/28/2009 - 03:11 am Title: Chapter 35: Watcher's Assistance & Chapter 36: Trouble
o-oh...trouble is coming on buffy and spike's way...
Author's Response: Trouble is never good!