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Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/03/2012 - 11:52 am Title: I Know

Oh, the emotions and angst and development are really good.

Notes:

"had ran outside" s/b "had run outside"
"Spike was stood there," s/b "Spike was standing there"
"And me and Riley didn't come here together" s/b "…Riley and I…"
"We were barely stood next to each other" s/b "…barely standing…"
"franticly" s/b "frantically"

Author's Response: Firstly "And me and Riley" also "barely stood" is speech so thats obviously a choice! I agree you might not have identified it in other areas, but come on! Thats so obviously a choice because thats how an average girl Buffy's age would talk! The others are errors I can understand, but this is the first time I've thought you were taking the P out of me!

Reviewer: Brunettepet Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/20/2009 - 05:22 pm Title: I Know

They're both emotional powder kegs and nowhere near over one another. Spike has no right to be angry if Buffy's with another guy, but his overreaction was certainly telling.

Reviewer: BellaFrog Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/15/2009 - 11:12 pm Title: I Know

i think this is really really great - and i think the way you're making it much more realistic is fantastic - when's the next one??

Author's Response: Thankyou so much, thats really great to hear...I'm a bit swamped at the moment with Uni work but I have one more Chapter ready, just needs editing so hopefully will be up by the end of the week, but then it might be a while before I can update again after that...

Reviewer: basket_case1880 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/09/2009 - 03:09 am Title: I Know

Loving the story s far. Can't wait for more.
I understand Spike has to be a bit nasty at the moment and I understand if you are finding it hard to write that part of Spike as I am trying to get through Spike's anger in one of my own fics.

Author's Response: Personally I find it quite easy to write angry Spike, its softer Spike I find harder to write, but all the angst and emotion generally I think is very difficult to bring across without seeming cheesey, which is why I appreciate reviews and comments so much because it lets me know if I've gone to far, not far enough etc...

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/08/2009 - 12:30 am Title: I Know

Spike was such a prick to Buffy! Glad she was able to hold her own. Looking forward to more!

Reviewer: yumimum Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2009 - 10:40 pm Title: I Know

Brilliant chapter. Very powerful. x

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2009 - 06:28 pm Title: I Know

Good to see you solved your posting problem. :)

So Spike was on stage (makes me wonder if Faith knew that). At last they talked a little, even if it was only a little bit.

Reviewer: albie Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2009 - 03:00 am Title: I Know

I didn't hate Spike at all. I think he overreacted and misconstrued, but other than that, all I see is that both Buffy and he are at this very raw state. I'm glad that once they got past the initial dramatics, they both seemed to recognize that in one another and both backed off before jarring the wound any further.

I really enjoyed this chapter. They needed this initial confrontation. It'll definitely be interesting to see what comes next.

Reviewer: Sanityfair Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2009 - 12:24 am Title: I Know

Thank for the update, painful though it was.

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