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Reviewer: spuffy chick Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/18/2009 - 04:26 am Title: Second Times the Charm

short and sweet....loved it!

Reviewer: tammy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2009 - 04:11 pm Title: Second Times the Charm

Loved it. You could always make it a series.

Reviewer: Sotia Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2009 - 03:42 pm Title: Second Times the Charm

Awww, cute!

I like how you write their voices. I think you could have made this a bit longer, but it's a good start and shows potential.

Also, and please don't hate me for saying this, you may want to get a beta, as there were a few sentences where structure was a bit... off.

Will be looking forward to more from you!
*hugs*

Reviewer: sask Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2009 - 09:47 am Title: Second Times the Charm

awww that was really sweet...

Reviewer: Darknight Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2009 - 12:47 am Title: Second Times the Charm

That was lovely! You should definitely give writing more stories a go.

Reviewer: burnkitty Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2009 - 12:05 am Title: Second Times the Charm

*picks you up and spins you around* OMG OMG OMG!! I am so glad you finally posted this! *squeeeeeeeeeee* I love it!! LOVE IT!!

I agree with your end note, you should never be afraid to write a story.

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 10:00 pm Title: Second Times the Charm

I wondered about the male slayer mentioned in the summary how he would fit in. I'm glad I checked it out - this story was just cute :)

Reviewer: Sibb Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 03:26 am Title: Second Times the Charm

Very sweet and just sappy enough to be adorable. Loved it!

Author's Response: it was a completly random story thought too. im very proud of it. I hope to write more in the future

Reviewer: immortalangel08 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 03:26 am Title: Second Times the Charm

Great story. I can't wait to read more from you. Keep up the awesome work.

Reviewer: Jake Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 03:22 am Title: Second Times the Charm

I loved it. I'd love to see more by you. Very original idea.

Reviewer: AMI Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 03:21 am Title: Second Times the Charm

I really liked it alot. It was really good and it was your first story? good job! Loved all of it , especially the baby. So sweet. If only the stupid comics were like this.:(

Enjoyed..

Reviewer: xoChantelly Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 03:02 am Title: Second Times the Charm

Yeah! This was great I loved the ending.. Great job hun! I really enjoyed it = )

Reviewer: Callmekitten Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2009 - 02:44 am Title: Second Times the Charm

Thanks for giving me the honor of letting me read and leave first review. Nicely done, and I am very proud of you. Now bask in the warm fuzzies of your glowing review *mwah*

Original idea, good set up, well done.

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