Reviews For Strange Fruit
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Reviewer: CallMeKitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/29/2009 - 11:44 pm Title: Two

I think your depiction of Buffy's undeniable obsession is right on. On to tnext chap :)

Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 10:21 pm Title: Two

I felt I should add something else after I posted my previous review. I know I may come off as very critical, but I don't intend for it to be taken negatively. Any suggestions I make are only to raise your awareness of things you may have missed. I really do like this story and I don't want to give any impression otherwise.

Author's Response: Hello, I didn't take your review negatively but rather as good constructive criticism. I know that it takes other people to point out flaws and I'd rather have them pointed out to me then never improve. So, I will do my best to follow your advice and try to make less with the wordiness and and more with the grammar. I appreciate you pointing this out to me, especially so early on, so that I can (hopefully) make reading the rest of the story a more enjoyable experience. Thank you for your insight.

Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 10:18 pm Title: Two

I like this story so far. It gives an interesting perspective on how Buffy might have felt after she came back. I think the writing is beautiful and sophisticated, but sometimes excessively wordy. Keep in mind that there's a difference between eloquent and excessive.



Another point on that same note, indefatigable is a bit archaic and I doubt most of your readers will have any clue what it means. If your goal is to make them grab a dictionary, I'm sure you'll succeed in that. I noticed a few typos and run-on sentences, but no major problems. I advise that you properly separate your dependent and independent clauses for a smoother flow.



If you would like me to beta for you, please e-mail me and let me know. I'm not signed on here as a beta reader, but I'm more than happy to edit once I've offered. Again, lovely story so far. I look forward to reading more.

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/24/2009 - 10:41 pm Title: Two

Enjoyed the update. :)

Reviewer: Tanit Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/24/2009 - 05:35 pm Title: Two

Wow, this is beautifully written. Buffy's state of mind is so heartbreaking, and your portrayal of it is unflinching without being unkind to her.

Thoroughly enjoying this, and I'm looking forward to more. :)

Reviewer: Gentleviewer Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/24/2009 - 11:29 am Title: Two

What a fantastic couple of starting chapters. Lovely use of language and great exploration of Buffy's desperation in those early months after resurrection. Can't wait to read more.

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