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Reviewer: xaphania Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/27/2009 - 12:07 pm Title: Four

*sigh* I always feel so sorry for season 6 Spike at this point. He's trying so hard. Good chapter :)

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/27/2009 - 09:30 am Title: Four

It wasn't me who said to cut down on the wordiness, I like your storytelling/your writing (can't express it better).
You write season six Buffy well. A hard time for Buffy. And yet she is not accepting help when someone offers. Just because it's Spike.
Enjoyed the update.

Reviewer: xaphania Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/26/2009 - 11:33 am Title: Three

Here on a rec from Tanit, and I'm glad she did rec this fic - really enjoying it so far.

Your writing style is great, really immersing me in the fic and the way you're dealing with S6 Buffy's issues is working really well. The B/A memory was handled well in this chapter, I can see where you're coming from with including it.

I'll be looking forward to more :)

Reviewer: Brett Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/26/2009 - 05:02 am Title: Three

oh Wow. This is getting good. You write beautifully. I definately want more of your story please.

Reviewer: Tanit Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 11:57 pm Title: Three

Hey, Rio --

I sent you a message through the contact author page, but I've had problems with that in the past. Just wanted to give you a heads up. Nothing to get too excited about if it didn't go through, mostly words of encouragement on keeping up the good work. :)

-Kristi

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I did receive the email but I haven't had a chance to answer it until now. I'm glad you like the story and I hope you continue to like it as it progresses. Also, thank you so much for the rec (I noticed it mention in Brett's review). :)

Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 10:21 pm Title: Two

I felt I should add something else after I posted my previous review. I know I may come off as very critical, but I don't intend for it to be taken negatively. Any suggestions I make are only to raise your awareness of things you may have missed. I really do like this story and I don't want to give any impression otherwise.

Author's Response: Hello, I didn't take your review negatively but rather as good constructive criticism. I know that it takes other people to point out flaws and I'd rather have them pointed out to me then never improve. So, I will do my best to follow your advice and try to make less with the wordiness and and more with the grammar. I appreciate you pointing this out to me, especially so early on, so that I can (hopefully) make reading the rest of the story a more enjoyable experience. Thank you for your insight.

Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 10:18 pm Title: Two

I like this story so far. It gives an interesting perspective on how Buffy might have felt after she came back. I think the writing is beautiful and sophisticated, but sometimes excessively wordy. Keep in mind that there's a difference between eloquent and excessive.



Another point on that same note, indefatigable is a bit archaic and I doubt most of your readers will have any clue what it means. If your goal is to make them grab a dictionary, I'm sure you'll succeed in that. I noticed a few typos and run-on sentences, but no major problems. I advise that you properly separate your dependent and independent clauses for a smoother flow.



If you would like me to beta for you, please e-mail me and let me know. I'm not signed on here as a beta reader, but I'm more than happy to edit once I've offered. Again, lovely story so far. I look forward to reading more.

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 08:59 pm Title: Three

Interesting, seeing Angel's eyes becoming blue like Spike's.
And kissing good bye. Yeah, and Buffy should look out for Willow.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your reviews.I'm glad you like the story so far and I hope you'll continue to enjoy it int he future. I'll also take your advice and try to cut down on the wordiness, it's a really bad habit. Thank you again for the great feedback.

Reviewer: Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 01:57 pm Title: Three

Great chapter. Buffy is confused and mixed up but trying to hang onto her old, guarded self from after Angelus, and you make it very clear without having to come out and state it. I liked the idea of the dream, and the goodbye kiss.

Reviewer: Tanit Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/25/2009 - 01:54 pm Title: Three

Nothing to worry about from me with the B/A scene. It was, like everything else you've written so far, beautiful. Lyrical, even. I like your thinking, too, that Spike-sex isn't a magic bullet. Oh, SURE, it can't hurt... hahah I'm just sayin'. :D But it's no miracle to instant Buffy happiness.

And this: She had been cold for so long that she no longer knew what to make of the heat.

Makes me want to pet her hair and tell her that it's okay to live and love again.

This is so brilliantly written. Thank you for sharing.

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/24/2009 - 10:41 pm Title: Two

Enjoyed the update. :)

Reviewer: Tanit Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/24/2009 - 05:35 pm Title: Two

Wow, this is beautifully written. Buffy's state of mind is so heartbreaking, and your portrayal of it is unflinching without being unkind to her.

Thoroughly enjoying this, and I'm looking forward to more. :)

Reviewer: Gentleviewer Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/24/2009 - 11:29 am Title: Two

What a fantastic couple of starting chapters. Lovely use of language and great exploration of Buffy's desperation in those early months after resurrection. Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/23/2009 - 06:04 pm Title: One

I don't have a clue yet where you will lead the story too but I like the first chapter (and will check out more).
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/23/2009 - 02:26 pm Title: One

Very well done. You handle how buffy avoids introspection by making it not about her thoughts on her feelings, but describing in vivid detail exactly what is happening inside her in reaction to Spike. This looks like a great start to a story that shows an accurate and raw part of Buffy's character.

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