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Reviewer: Jeana Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/30/2009 - 11:04 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Date: 07/30/2009 - 11:04 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
LOVE IT!! Please review soon!!
Reviewer: All4Spike Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/30/2009 - 11:01 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Date: 07/30/2009 - 11:01 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Intriguing start, but the huge chunks of text do make it a bit hard to read. Might be a good idea to break up into more paragraphs. I'm guessing the 'precious cargo' is a baby? Looking forward to the revelation that Spike is back!
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/30/2009 - 10:39 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Date: 07/30/2009 - 10:39 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Ah I'd guessed right what this precious cargo is. :D
Interesting start / twist. Looking forward to more.
Reviewer: Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/30/2009 - 10:24 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Date: 07/30/2009 - 10:24 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
okay, i see this is your first fiction, so i'm not being mean, just a word of advice, i would break up the huge paragraphs, it would make it a lot easier to read, i would also suggest getting a beta.
Reviewer: Amaya Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/30/2009 - 09:05 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Date: 07/30/2009 - 09:05 pm Title: Prologue/Chapter 1
Hi. Please keep updating this story because I am liking it so far. I hope that it has a happy end. Bye.