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Reviewer: demona424 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/23/2011 - 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 8: It's to real

I'm all caught up! And now I'm bummed because it's on such a sad part of the story. Good idea to change the point of view. I started reading the first chapter in the previous version and this way makes it much easier to get into the story. :-)

Author's Response: Thanks but the credit for the pov change goes mainly to my wonderful beta gopher101! Also this story will continue to be regularly updated so please keep reading and reviewing! I appreciate knowing what the readers think!

Reviewer: gopher101 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/23/2011 - 09:27 pm Title: Chapter 8: It's to real

Love it. ;)


Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: rkm Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/23/2011 - 12:51 am Title: Chapter 8: It's to real

oh dear. seeing/reading someone's pain is so not easy. (and neither is writing it, i'm sure.)

looking forward to more questions being answered ..

(by the way, you have my sympathies regarding the recent upheaval. i can't speak for others, but those who care about the authors as well as the stories ... we can wait until YOU'RE ready.)

Author's Response: Thanks for noticing! I started writing off my own experience and it was not easy... hence the shortness of the chapter. I will continue to update and give this couple the happy ending I didn't get *opps spoiler alert!* Also thanks for the advice on waiting I needed someone to say that it was okay!!!

Reviewer: rkm Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/20/2011 - 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 7; Misdirections and miscomunications

well, so far, it's an interesting ride. angst-y, too. but nothing more than quite a few misconceptions can do ...


Author's Response: Thank you! I am trying to make it angst-y!

Reviewer: carrot Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07/25/2011 - 11:59 am Title: Chapter 7; Misdirections and miscomunications

I tried to stay away till you finish it cause I don't wanna be heartbroken over another wip but I was weak. It's great! I wonder how will it unwrape itself?! Please keep writting!

Author's Response: I know how you feel I get so caught up in WIP's and I'm always crushed when the updates stop! Don't worry for this one though I have no doubt that I will finish it and it will have a happy ending! I will try to update every Saturday that way I should finish soon *especial with school, yuck*!

Reviewer: gopher101 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07/14/2011 - 12:33 am Title: Chapter 6: Revenge is a dish best severed cold

I personally loved the update changes, wink.

Reviewer: gopher101 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07/10/2011 - 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 5; Summer luvin'

thank you for the update, I sent you an email so you should have my email address now.
So just ask when you need help.

Reviewer: gopher101 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/27/2011 - 10:13 pm Title: Chapter 4: Something Change While Others Stay the Same

The best thing to do is find a beta if you don't already have one. They can help quite a bit having a fresh pair of eyes to look it over.
I liked the POV's of this chapter, but you could have added a few more details. Not only does it make the story a bit longer it , it juices up the story, and details might help format out the text.
If you want, I can try to help you out, I don't know how good I would be but I am willing to try. I do like your story so far and wish for you to continue.

Reviewer: bruni Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/27/2011 - 09:50 pm Title: Chapter 4: Something Change While Others Stay the Same

I like the story, it's sweet and all but I think that the way u are writting it, the third person mode, takes a lot of the appeal, like everything is happening too fast and it takes the spark of the story...just my opinion ! but i like the story, just not the third voice that u are using

Author's Response: The voice is going to switch soon don't worry! The story will slow down she is just speeding past the earlier years, they are in junior high right now and she is 30 it's kinda hard to remember that far back into her past plus what he told her about his point of view during their younger years!

Reviewer: gopher101 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/17/2011 - 11:45 pm Title: Chapter 3: Pesky Pranks and the Art of Going to Far

Tsk, tsk, tsk, Spike did a bad thing. I wonder how he will make it up to her.
I love how you incorprated the whole boys picks on girl he likes. Very well done.

Author's Response: You just made my day and Spike will pay dearly for his very bad actions!

Reviewer: Sibb Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/17/2011 - 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 3: Pesky Pranks and the Art of Going to Far

Thank you for the explanation. I know that not all Spuffy fics have happy endings but I'll certainly be holding out for one here :-).

Author's Response: This story should have a happy ending just some sad parts! It's about life is about the choices you make and Buffy and Spike don't always make the right ones!

Reviewer: Sibb Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/17/2011 - 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 3: Pesky Pranks and the Art of Going to Far

I was rather liking this little fic but this was pretty cruel. I hope that this doesn't set the tone for the rest of their relationship because it isn't very nice. I know that Spike has a temper and can be quick to strike out and taunt Buffy but a deliberately planned out thing like the note (that was flat out mean by the way) and the song is a little out of character. I do like the way that you've set up the story and loved the first two chapters but, sorry to say, this chapter was a bit painful to read. My hope is that this is somehow necessary to the rest of the story and that things will all work out in the end. I look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Yes, sorry for the cruelness that took place in this chapter. Basically Spike is not someone that likes to be embarrassed as for the song I can not write songs so pretend it was good. Trust me when I say that this was a one of a kind chapter and Spike will kiss major butt in the following chapters! With these two drastic measures need to be taken and the divorce will end up being Buffy's fault this is Spikes time to grow and the divorce will be hers! And as painful as this was to read it was even worse to write!

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Date: 06/15/2011 - 07:42 am Title: Chapter 2 A new take on the same old story

It's very scary to be a first time author! I know how I felt when I started putting my story out there. I think you have a very powerful story inside your head. Minx gives you some great advice. Slow down and tell it, don't rush. Set scenes.

One thing people say often is "Show, don't tell." If you can show how he is being inconsistent with her (rather than say that he was) it has a lot more power. Tell a little story, showing how he behaved and describe her feelings as it happens. That helps pull the reader in to care about the characters.

What you can do is to find how your favorite authors "show, don't tell." Notice how they write a scene, then try to picture your scene in a similar way - but with your voice - if that makes sense.

You have a lot of story here - best wishes with it!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I will work on that!

Reviewer: rkm Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/14/2011 - 11:46 pm Title: Chapter 2 A new take on the same old story

yeah, i can definitely see pattern for their future ... and it's not a pretty one. and knowing spike and buffy, i'm not anticipating they'll get their happy ending. but i'll enjoy the ride ...

Author's Response: I am very indecisive about the ending at this point I want them to have a happy ending but somehow I don't think that will work out between the two of them and their issues... oh well we will find out as it unravels!

Reviewer: Kay Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/14/2011 - 02:56 am Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings

Aww how cute!This is going to be great!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: rkm Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/13/2011 - 12:51 am Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings

hmm - kinda surprised the 'love of her life' was spike ... but gotta feeling this is going to be an interesting ride ...

Author's Response: Thanks! There will be some bad blood between her and Spike though they aren't getting together any time soon!

Reviewer: Nana Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/12/2011 - 05:07 pm Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings

Great story I enjoy the ones from the beginning of their lives. You have two typos, (you must type very fast).
The first is “When they BOARDED the bus Buffy, The second and I think it is more writer's choice than anything - her groups INTO (one word not two). I normally don't send spelling corrections, this story is so darn nice I just wanted to see it a bit more perfect. Thanks!

Author's Response: Thank you I will have to fix those, I was typing it in a hurry so typos! Also, I am very happy that you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Minx DeLovely Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/12/2011 - 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings

Hey, it seems like you have a really interesting story here, but you're in too much of a rush to tell it. This was an issue I had when I first started writing--I think everyone does. You have about four or
five chapters of info packed into one. It would be better to really set the scene in the courthouse, describe how gaunt Buffy looks, what she does, go in depth about her collapse in the bathroom. Maybe even have a conversation with her husband as they part showing the devastation of her loss.

I hope I haven't offended you with my comment. I think you have the makings of something wonderful here.

Author's Response: Thanks. I usually write non fiction so this is all very new to me and I changed the begging around five times before I settled on divorce so you were right I will have to watch myself in that aspect. I am very glad that you liked it!

Author's Response: When I said begging I meant beginning!

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