I like Ruby, she's cool. Sad that Buffy and Spike fought--they said some pretty mean things to each other. they're gonna be okay, though, right? pretty please?

i really do like the premise for the story and look forward to where you go with this. My suggestions, though? Okay, i watch RW too, i saw Las Vegas, they had a 3some during the very first episode. However, i still felt like a lot of this is moving too fast, especially concerning Spike and buffy. You would have a better reaction and feeling for it if you spread the action a bit, built the tension. And...I'm also having a problem with Ruby. She's very Mary Sue and she's kinda like Faith-lite. I understand having other characters, but you are relying on her a lot in this story, almost making her the protaganist, as if the readers could relate to this character. More often than not, early writers put themselves in the story, make their own Mary Sues, and maybe that's what you did here(i can't say for sure, as i don't know you). However, what i can say is that as a reader I don't have any draw to her, i find her somewhat false, forced, and idealized in a way Mary Sues are, and wish the focus would be on the characters i do know. This is not a flame and i hope you see that. I see potential here and i wanted to give you some real advice. I do hope you continue and I look forward to more.