Date: 10/22/2004 - 04:58 am Title: Tell Me What You Want
Meat curtains? Cum catcher? Cum bank?
This is funny
Author's Response: Trust me....I'm done with the out there language. I will try my best to redeem myself. I hope the story is at least still interesting enough for you to keep reading it.
Date: 10/22/2004 - 04:55 am Title: Tell Me What You Want
Um....are you trying to be funny here? I hope so, because I've never seen anything that made me laugh so much. I mean, who talks like that? I think you need to tone down the vivid imagery and try to make your dialogue a little more believable.
Author's Response: You are right. I admit when I wrote some of it I laughed too. I am severly paying for it. Trust me. Thank you for the feedback. Hopefully, I have not spoiled the story too much for you.
Date: 10/21/2004 - 07:39 am Title: Tell Me What You Want
Right out of Full Monty! Man, I guess he has decided to claim her for himself!
Date: 10/20/2004 - 07:13 pm Title: Tell Me What You Want
Yes, can say it too: This was great. I LOVED the strip scene. It was hot!
Good idea to put this one in - Buffy as a male.
Cordykitten
Author's Response: I was worried about that scene. It was a b**ch to write. About the male/female thing. I'm glad you got it. Thank you for feedback. I need it.
Date: 10/20/2004 - 06:02 pm Title: Tell Me What You Want
Oh my gosh. That was great. Every time they have sex it's always new, nothing gets old or repeats in this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for noticing. I try to keep it fresh. Always appreciate the feedback.