The smut scenes were hot, yes, but I can't bring myself to read the long dragged out words they both screamed. "Sounded" too fake in my eyes, like those girls in porns who screamed like they were visected, and while I could quite picture the scenes vividly, the dragged out words really turned me off. Maybe you could just try pronounciations of sounds and tone down the CAPs. Just my 2 pence.