you have a great story, and it's fairly well written...but you really need a beta. You run sentences together, it lack punctuation which makes reading it difficult, and you often confuse your and you're. A beta would really help, because you have a GREAT story here...and it's a shame that it's so hard to get through. *Ebontier (not signed in)

Great story loving it so far, although I hope your not going to make sunday Buffy's sex slave.

Why do I get the impression Sunday has an agenda all her own? Still loving this. (Zarrah - not signed in)

Thanks for the reviews. I appreciate it and should have another chapter posted soon, hopefully by tonight or in the morning.

I really like this story. Buffy being turned is always fun to see especially when Spike is the one doing the turning. Not sure what to make of Dru at this point. It'll be interesting to see what she does if/when Buffy and Spike grow closer. The only sugestion I could make would be to have a beta to look over your chapters. I found myself having to re-read sentences several times to understand what you ment and its distracting me from the story. Other than that, its a great start and I look forward to more.

love this story so far and im a fan for buffy being a vampire, its brilliant how u can exploit all the desires she had when she was the slayer but too afraid to act on them. plz dont ensoul her, if u have planned that plz dont start to make her broody and whiny and in pain for the things shes done!! ur doing a brill job with buffy and going into detail about her, not too weak or broody but not gone off the rails. uv done a mixture of conflicted feeling and im enjoying reading your work!! plz do another chapter soon.!!

and is she going to kill her friends/

still loving it

great so far