I had myself a good laugh over that 'fuck me' .. 'nope, not here for that' part - too funny. I forgot to menitoin too I love the title you chose for the fic, it's brilliant.
Glad to see Spike is getting his attitude knocked down and seeing himself and the present woman in the perspective that he should. Poor Buffy. I really feel bad for her. Let's hope Spike can make himself worthy of her when it comes time. Thank you for sharing this fic, I'm truly enjoying it. Kuddos sweety, can't wait for the next chapter... I bet it's going to be a real shocker.

Loved it, loved it, LOVED IT. Buffy thinking he was crazy was hysterical, of course I would think the same as her too if someone were to come to my door too with that kind of story. Soooooo glad she asked him if he wanted some breakfast. Can't wait for the next chapter sweety, well done. Smooches.

ok - so one big fat review without getting to specific - at least for now...

WOW! Okay, where to begin. Hmmmm, how about after I read this all in one sitting, I felt the serious need to crawl back to the drawing board on my own writing? So where do I sign up for your lectures on writing? Cuz I am SO there with bells on. This is awesome sweety, I truly mean it. Impressed isn’t a strong enough word but it’s all I could manage to come up with at the moment.

Your style and poetic approach is absolutely spell-binding. All the action you have going on... mind-boggling – never a dull moment. I like how you’ve created an ambiguous sense of who Buffy feels she can and/or cannot trust., it keeps the reader guessing. And aside from the obvious humor, I LOVE the subtle humor you’ve added in as well - especially with Andrew. I found myself having a hearty chuckle here and there, you’ve truly captured his canon personality and allowed it to blossom to a proportion that fits this timeline. Too frickin funny!

I thought for a moment that Spike wasn’t going to let Buffy near him at all but was relieved that wasn’t the case (it’s the romantic spuffy lover in me – can’t help it). What I’m picking up on from his character – not sure if I’m correct in my perception, though - is that he’s still uncomfortable with the idea of being with her, beyond the present mayhem that’s brought them together. Seems there’s something darker going on with him that perhaps we’ll discover later?

You’ve created such an incredible host of interesting and colorful characters that blend very well in this inter-dimensional, sci-fi styled story. My hat is off to you. Bows to your muse on hands and knees repeatedly while chanting, “I’m not worthy, I’m not worthy.” So tell me... how many chapters long will this story of yours be? And have you considered turning it into an original work of fiction to perhaps e-publish at some later point in time? I would seriously think about it if I were you. Bravo my friend, and I’m sorry it’s taken me this long to read it... Tina goes off to spank her bad-boy muse for keeping her so busy. Pooey, me-needs more reading time. Smooches to you my friend.


Author's Response: Hey IBE! First of all, thanks for all drop-jaw compliments - you can;t see it, but my brain is actually blushing. It's hard to believe that the last time I saw you, I was getting worked over by the stasi at an Applebees! I see you picked up on the whole 'something's-seriously-wrong-with-Spike' vibe. It's kinda critical to his arc here, and all I can say is it's gonna get a whole lot worse before it gets a whole lot better. Buffy has been seriously fun to write and seriously hard to write. Again you're spot on about the ambiguity there. I've been approaching my Buffy as half-zenned-out warrior/ half burned-out vet. She's not exactly nuts, but her psyche could definitely use a few band-aids her and there. Andrew has been a whole bag'o'giggles to work out. Seriously, I'm a little concerned about how addicted I'm getting to writing him. I made a chapter-by-chapter outline that I've been working from pretty closely, and by my count there's 8 chapters left plus a fairly long epilogue. I'm aiming to finish it by Christmas. Thanks again, for the shot of confidence, Tina. This review really means a lot to me.

I've been so bad about keeping up with reviews, sorry. I read the last few chapters and loved the diaries bit. It was a neat switch to first person and gave some interesting perspective. This chapter has me confused as to who is really good. I feel bad for poor Giles, worse for Buffy b/c of Dawn - who wtf is she thinking anyway? Anf Tar.... scary. Willow seems to be a pretty innocent vistim in all this but I suupose that reamins to be seen. And Faith - ho much? My God, I hope Spike isn't walking out on Buffy b/c of Giles little talk. I get it and understand, but it runs deeper than what Giles understands too. Looking forward to the next installment buddy. Good chapter. Smooches.

Author's Response: Thanks I.B.E. "Faith, ho much?" lol!

GAH.... uhmm........... yeah........ WOW........ uhmm... ok, I think I'm under control now. This is the one story above all of yours I've been dying for you to finish. Can I just say what a wonderful job you did here with expressing Spike's thoughts, how innocent he truly seemed? Please oh please do continue this story and update soon. I can only hope nothing happens during his training that will make it impossible for them to make love later - I've been looking forward to that for eons now. Bravo on a superb chapter darling. Hugs you tight.

WOW, when I got to the end of the chapter I was like noooooo, where's the rest? Giggles. I think your muse is on a roll here and I can't wait to see the results. I know this will be all with the Buffy as submissive, but I'm curious - will Spike ever play the sub. role in a fic entitled, hmmmm, 'ultimatums'? Giggles, I had to go there. Please continue - you've got my attention. I just hope Spike oils up too.

Author's Response: The rest will come hun. Perhaps not quite as soon as I had thought though. Nasty RL came up and bit me today ao... it may be until the weekend that I update. Yes Muse is on a roll. She wants to write, is dying to write, fills my head constantly, but there are time constraints. Can't very well think of this stuff when I'm engaged in parent meetings now can I? Yes this is Buffy as the subbie and I really don't think I can do a switch. Love the title but well, I can see Buffy being all dominatrix to lots of people, Xander, Tara, even Anya or giles though that is yuck, but not to Willow and certianly not to Spike. I don;t really know why. Maybe because I see guys on the receiving end a whimpy or maybe because she kicks his ass outside the bedroom so he gets his trun behind closed doors. Whatever the reason, I simply can't do subbie Spike. I tried once, even started a follow up on Naughty Girl, but it fizzled out. The wonderful and talented Sarah Aless wrote a good switch though. It's in the "You Know You Want To " Series. And yes, as my final passing thought, oily Spike is good, very very good. Thanks sweetie.

Author's Response: Okay, I take that back. I will update Thursday. Yay Muse. I was tired and crunched for time but she oh no, you are writing. That girl is a slave driver.

Whewwww, oh my. Need a cigarette here. He seems so evil but I get it, I really do. And the trust factor they have for one another, or more so Buffy is great indeed. That was a huge WOW that his beast came out like that. I mean I guess the demon's instinct concerning his mate doesn't really know the difference when it comes to a game, it just knows submission, interesting. And of course I'm glad Spike was able to reign it in. Wonderful chappy hon. Looking forward to the next with anticiaption.

Author's Response: He is evil here but that is the idea and I'm so glad you understand. She needs this, needs it hard, craves it, after all the violence she commits day in and day out. She feels guilt because of it and this enables her to let go completely, to feel forgiven and clean again. On Spike's part, he loves her so has to dig deep inside and let his demon come forth just a little in order to do these things. Don't get me wrong, he gets off on them too, very much so, but it's a game of give and take, trust, love, and of course control. Still, sweet William would crack at her cries, so William the Bloody must take the reins. Glad you enjoyed it. I do hope to finish writing this soon, possibly today.

“Do you want to get into me?” LMFAO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That’s priceless. Wow - all with the hotness here and rough tumblies with much biting. So he turned her huh? Interesting. Sequel perhaps? Well done sweets - smooches.

Wonderful job here, particularly with the cliffie, very well timed indeed and will undoubtedly draw your readers back in. Oh, before I forget, thank you so much for the compliment on my little Army story... I felt I was taking a gamble by posting it and I’m thrilled you enjoy it.

I have one piece of advice for you up front in lieu of the upcoming n/c sex and that is I would change your rating to NC17. You just never know who might be following this and get upset then flame you out, even if you choose not to go into great detail, it’s the nature of the subject.

Totally love the background on Buffy. You gave us a good feel for her person and what has made the woman we see today who is reluctant to let go of the child within. Gotta admit, I got a reeeeeeeeeal creepy feeling about Liam. Like any other reader, I try to guess in advance and of course voice it here, but in no way do I expect you release any spoilers. I can’t help but think that Liam, even if he’s initially upset he won’t be Buffy’s first, will somehow be very uncaring and have violent, physical, tendencies. If I’m wrong that’s all fine and well. Poor Buffy, seems ALL the men in her life, and future, are right bastards but very accurate, characteristically, for the time period you have here. Seems she is truly alone unless at some point you introduce a friend, say perhaps a certain red-head??? I think that would be wonderful if you could include Doyle. Oz I can see, Xander not so much but that’s not to say he couldn’t be well integrated, it just depends on how much canon personality you allow your characters to retain. I know what type of role I see Doyle playing in this but since you have things pretty well mapped out, I’ll keep my opinion to myself and let your muse do what it wants with it honey. I just thought, hey, he’s Irish, he’s cute, why not? LOL. Looking forward to seeing Dru make her grand entrance. I’m sure she’ll be as evil and insane as she always is, stirring up trouble and what not. She always makes period fics interesting.

I’m glad you have Jolynn helping you on this one, her help will no doubt be invaluable. She’s one very smart and talented lady that doesn’t candy coat things and God love her for it. On that note, I’m sure you’re fearful of flamers, aren’t all we authors to some extent? However, don’t let it stop you from writing any particular scene in all it’s harsh brutality, *winks*, if you don’t ‘feel’ it, neither will the reader... you get my meaning. If a certain someone, and there are two to my knowledge, begin flaming, I give you the same advice I gave Jolynn... delete it... immediately, b/c they tend to feed off any form of response you might write however polite or not and before you know it, the review system will be abused by back and forth banter and its not there for that reason. Plus it will only bring you down, it did me anyway when I got flamed.

Personally, I want to read this story and be drawn into the raw reality of what goes on and be mad at characters, feel sympathy for the ones who deserve it and of course the eventual hope of true love that springs in the breasts of our blonde couple when that time comes. If you accomplish getting people riled up like that, you are indeed a very effective writer. I can’t wait until you post again and I truly mean that sweety. LOL, I’ll let you know if I see you pulling any Mary Sue’s, I totally get what you mean there.

On the n/c sex, because let’s face it, that’s what it inevitably will be given the time era and personalities of those involved, unless you want any kind of , violent/forceful, rape scene, I (all just my personal opinion here) think it’s more powerful to delve into character thoughts surrounding the beg/mid/end of the act more than the act itself. If you do include rape, the only way to soften the blow to sensitive readers, if that is what you wish to do, focus more on the act than the feelings and keep it brief. The feelings involved are better examined in the aftermath b/c when one is raped, there is a sense of shock that sets into their mind after ‘fight or flight’ has run its course. If, however, you don’t give a rat’s ass what the reader thinks and do what your muse wants, by all means ignore what I said. We’re all adults here and I know I can handle it and would prefer you do it your way.

One last thing, again just a personal opinion. Whenever you do have a chapter that includes Gaelic words, unless you have an end a/n that isn’t meant to be read until the chappy is finished, you may want to state their meanings at the beginning. That way there is no mystery or a ‘huh?’ when people run across them b/c I know I’d prefer to know the meaning so I can read it with total understanding from start to finish.

A very beautifully written second chapter. Love the poetic use of descriptive words and applaud the wonderful timing/intro to Spike. Hugs and kisses to you sweety. I have your email address in my book. I’m sure Jolynn is all the help you’ll need but if you so choose, feel free to email me... tina_trammel@sbcglobal.net


Author's Response: I can't help writing cliffhangers. It's a really bad habit of mine. I was going to rate the chapters individually, and hope that people saw the NC17 category but it's probably better just to rate it all as NC17. Thanks for the advice. In terms of spoilers, you are very correct about Liam. Beneath his cold exterior lies a dark personality, bitter at the war in his country and hungry to lash out. Buffy being taken by William may just provide the amunition that he needs... Oh and Im going to find a way to work in a believable Xander. His character is just so conflicted that I can't ignore it. I was wondering whether you would be okay at having a look at the rape scene. I'm going to send it to Jolynn and see whether it will incite flames or be too brutal. I would love to hear your perspective. I really want to have feedback before I throw it out there. Thanks for letting me know about the Gaelic words. Im sorry I didn't post meanings in the first chapter. Thank you for reviewing that second chapter. I really didn't like its structure and was worried over the reaction. I'll definately email you. Thank you so much.

Hi there sweety... I've had a busy summer (hey, met JM for the first time at a con – woo hoo!) but am finally home after a long vacation (while in NY I had to deal with dialup internet, UGHH!) Anyways, in getting caught up with everything around me in the spuffy world and writing, I went over my list and found not only have you not updated lately but I forgot to leave you the review I promised. I am so sorry sweety, but here it is.

It was of course, a brilliant chapter and accurate depiction of the treatment towards woman for the times. Angleus... shudders - what a creep, but I love it. It adds to the rich fabric of your story.

On a different note, I hope this review/message find you well and just busy with RL stuff. I really want to see you continue with FOG - it's bloody brilliant so far and I’m not just saying that - I can see it taking it's place among the ranks here in the top ten. I know I'm a huge fan.

Many hugs and kisses to you and your muse darling. Hope to hear from you soon. Take care.

GAH!!! Very good, now I need a smoke. WHewww. Feel free to write a sequel. And hey, take advantage of the mirrors in that place, giggles.

OH. MY. GOD!!! I was JUST thinking about this story the other day - no joke - and then POOF... you posted - SQUEEEE!!! I don't do too much reading these days, but I can honestly tell you I adore this fic, it really has me intrigued with the angle in which you approach the characters.. And if you still need a beta sweety, I'd be happy to help, it's up to you. I'm still taking time off from my own writing (back in college at the mo' & still going thru the motions of the big D) but still perform regular beta duties for Sotia, Dusty273 and Darkrivertempest. LOVED the chapter, boo. - "You modernize, I’ll… hookerize." - mwhahahahahahahah!!!

Please do write more soon, I'm dying to know what happens next. Oh - here's my address if you need it... tina_trammel@yahoo.com PS. When I get my maiden name back - I'm legally adding a second middle name for myself, kind of a family tradition, and I chose Elise. I adore her original character you created.