Date: 10/07/2007 - 11:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
It has promise, but forgive me if I am wrong but she is only four and a half months pregnant but hasn't seen spike in 4 months 3 weeks which is more so I feel a Jerry Springer moment coming on cos he can't be the father and she would have had to be a couple of weeks along-at the least-before she found out and its unlikely she would show at 4 & half months. Did you mean 5 & half months?
Author's Response: yeah five and a half or something I dont know I am confused lol! I am pretty sure shes 6ish. Cause time has passed by. I am going to go through the story and check it out in a few thanks for the review!
Date: 09/24/2007 - 06:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story has a lot of potential, but you really need to get a beta. There are a lot of mistakes such as: their, when it has to be they're. And aloud, in stead of allowed.
Author's Response: yeah I have a beta. Thanks for the review!
Date: 09/21/2007 - 12:09 am Title: Chapter 1
Oohhhhh, some fantastic angsty goodness. I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! You put a smile on my face!
Date: 09/19/2007 - 01:58 am Title: Chapter 1
hey i was reading the summary for this story and it sounded really interesting:).....you've got a really good start so far but i was wondering if you wanted me to beta it....just to expand on some things give it a little bit more detail.....i can email you this chapter if you want after i look at it.....:) i love the story so far but awesome job
Author's Response: Thank you so much for helping me! I love how you changed it, if you couldnt tell I am not much of a detail person. More of a person who is good at thinking of stories just not writing them lol!
Date: 09/18/2007 - 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great beginning! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: thanks :-D