[Report This]Date: 12/06/2008 - 01:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
I've reread the summary again; so the dream is important :D
Author's Response: Yes the daydreams are important!
[Report This]Date: 12/06/2008 - 01:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
The unknown person that commented is right about a beta (there are a lot of exclamation marks) - if you get a good one they don't only help with grammar and spelling, they help with a plot too. When I reread my comments I sometimes could use a beta too ;) (A list of beta readers is here on SR when you're on the homepage.)
I'm only here to read :)
Seems this Buffy is determinate / knows what she wants, having long decided on the school she wants to go. Well at last regarding the school.
Mmmh only a daydream? Makes me wonder if you'll make more of this dream (if it's important).
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you for the comment and the advice =)
[Report This]Date: 12/06/2008 - 03:47 am Title: Chapter 1
More soon? Love it so far and can't wait
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm still working on the second chapter... Should be up soon =)
[Report This]Date: 12/05/2008 - 11:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great beginning! Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 12/05/2008 - 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
It has potential, but would be so much better if you had a beta reader to look over your work before you posted, they really come in handy. Also, you have one too many exclamation marks, those tend to be distracting and make it seem like everyone is yelling, just something to think about.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice and for reviewing =)
[Report This]Date: 12/05/2008 - 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Interesting beginning. I'd really like to read more ;)
Author's Response: Thank you
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