Reviewer: Kay
Anonymous
Date: 06/14/2011 - 02:56 am
Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings
Aww how cute!This is going to be great!!!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: rkm
Anonymous
Date: 06/13/2011 - 12:51 am
Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings
hmm - kinda surprised the 'love of her life' was spike ... but gotta feeling this is going to be an interesting ride ...
Author's Response: Thanks! There will be some bad blood between her and Spike though they aren't getting together any time soon!
Reviewer: Nana
Anonymous
Date: 06/12/2011 - 05:07 pm
Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings
Great story I enjoy the ones from the beginning of their lives. You have two typos, (you must type very fast).
The first is “When they BOARDED the bus Buffy, The second and I think it is more writer's choice than anything - her groups INTO (one word not two). I normally don't send spelling corrections, this story is so darn nice I just wanted to see it a bit more perfect. Thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you I will have to fix those, I was typing it in a hurry so typos! Also, I am very happy that you enjoyed it!
Reviewer: Minx DeLovely
Anonymous
Date: 06/12/2011 - 03:12 pm
Title: Chapter 1: Bad Beginnings
Hey, it seems like you have a really interesting story here, but you're in too much of a rush to tell it. This was an issue I had when I first started writing--I think everyone does. You have about four or
five chapters of info packed into one. It would be better to really set the scene in the courthouse, describe how gaunt Buffy looks, what she does, go in depth about her collapse in the bathroom. Maybe even have a conversation with her husband as they part showing the devastation of her loss.
I hope I haven't offended you with my comment. I think you have the makings of something wonderful here.
Author's Response: Thanks. I usually write non fiction so this is all very new to me and I changed the begging around five times before I settled on divorce so you were right I will have to watch myself in that aspect. I am very glad that you liked it!
Author's Response: When I said begging I meant beginning!
