Reviews For First Kiss
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Reviewer: kw Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/10/2006 - 01:22 am Title: Only Chapter

Great mind background to Once More With Feeling

Author's Response: Thank ya!

Reviewer: effection Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/05/2006 - 09:31 pm Title: Only Chapter

It's not bad... I like the twist, it has the potential to turn into a longer story. Great job for a first!

Author's Response: Thank you! I was scared that it was going to be really bad...

Reviewer: Megan/ Peta Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11/05/2006 - 09:25 pm Title: Only Chapter

I think you did a pretty good job with a difficult episode to turn into fiction. The only thing I would look at would be how you segue from song lyrics into thoughts. You had some great lines. I particularly loved--

His eyes- blue and penetrating. They always seemed like they could see right through her, see every thought she had. At the same time, they were always so soft when they looked at her. Even if she didn’t love him, who couldn’t love those eyes?

Good luck with your next project.

Author's Response: Thanks for the advice!

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