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Reviewer: luxferi Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/28/2006 - 05:31 am Title: Chapter 1

She smells with her mouth? :

"She unconsciously opened her mouth and smelled the food"

This is getting very interesting, I like the first chapter a lot, but I think you need a beta. There are mistakes at almost every sentence.

Cheers, write more please.

Author's Response: I meant she opened her mouth like she was going to bite it out of Spikes hand. Then she smelled it. Oh, and It's nice to know about the mistakes "Sarcasm*. But, anyways, thanks for the help.

Reviewer: ella Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/28/2006 - 02:02 am Title: Chapter 1

A promising start. Please, continue!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot. I appreciate it..

Reviewer: SarahandJamesFanatic Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/27/2006 - 11:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

good so far

Author's Response: Thanks. I hope you also like the rest.

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