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Reviewer: anonymouse Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06/16/2007 - 10:27 am Title: Chapter 1

I don't mean to sound like a flame, well maybe I do, but you really need to seriously consider your writing style. If Buffy had no money, how could she afford cherries. Look again at how you phrase what they say to each other. I would suggest that when you write a story or chapter that you walk away for an hour or so then come back to it and read it again. Go over it paragraph by paragraph and use spellcheck more. The basic storyline has a purpose, but you seem to get confused as to where you want to go with it.

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Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/13/2007 - 04:58 am Title: Chapter 1

Buffy was lucky that Anya stopped Xander and Willow from snooping ;-) Would have disturbed their fun.

Author's Response: Yes I am sure if they did that vision spell, the gang would have been in there alot sooner. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Spikes mrs Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/13/2007 - 03:19 am Title: Chapter 1

Ohhhhh I need more maybe a sequel? Cherries Chocolate and sex yummy......Wish I could of seen Xander's face at the end...This was great it cheered me a little after a rough night thank you honey Huggles you JeanetteSmileyCentral.comHave some of my cherries....lol

Author's Response: Thanks but unfourtunely not sequel planned. Thanks.

Reviewer: GrammarFreak Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/12/2007 - 08:58 pm Title: Chapter 1

Hot story... but try watching your tense when you write. Even in the same sentences you are using a wacky combination of past, present and present-in-past tense, and it tends to distract from the story!

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Reviewer: isa Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/12/2007 - 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh, I love it. it would have been so great to see buffy come out with the truth to her friends. And Ioved how she didn't care if the scoobies can her them or not.

keep up with the wonderful writing.

Author's Response: Nope at the end she admitted it to them, basically. Thanks

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