Date: 08/20/2006 - 10:10 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
You asked if I like anything about the chapter, and yes, I do. I like the reality of it, in that Buffy's feelings of worthlessness and unlovableness persist so strongly, rather than disappearing after one or two affirmations from William. I love that William is just as stubborn as she is (lucky for her, probably even more so!) and I like that he's not going anywhere until she believes him.
Date: 08/20/2006 - 02:03 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
cant wait to see what happens!!
Date: 08/20/2006 - 01:41 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
Poor William, just when he thought things were looking up, Buffy's brain (and insecurities) kick in and everything gets all bollixed up. More please. love the tale.
Date: 08/19/2006 - 08:42 pm Title: Chapter Thirty five
Interesting story dealing with the paranormal. I just read the entire thing in one sitting and I'm hooked! Poor Buffy and poor Will...something tells me this isn't going to get any easier.
Date: 08/19/2006 - 03:49 pm Title: Chapter Thirty five
Loved the chapter despite the wonky formatting. What was up with that? Especially loved your description about patience/impatience. Got Spike to a T there, and at the end as well.
Author's Response: Thanks. Not sure what happened with the formatting
Date: 08/19/2006 - 03:42 pm Title: Chapter Thirty five
Poor Will, I hope they work this out for both of their sakes. Update soon please!
Date: 08/19/2006 - 02:58 pm Title: Chapter Thirty five
good for william, buffy needs to see that he does love her! i love the way you use the thought sex instead of love like in the series, but with the au story, very insightful. please update soon
Date: 08/19/2006 - 02:51 pm Title: Chapter Thirty five
I actually liked the Wuthering Heights reference. Like the update. Eager for more. :)
Author's Response: I liked the Wuthering Heights reference too. :) Thank you.
Date: 08/19/2006 - 10:03 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
Loving this story...but a couple of word choices don't work: "She was as detrimental to him as breathing and blood..." Detrimental means "causing injury, damage or loss," and I very much doubt this is how William thinks of Buffy! A more appropriate word is integral, which means "being an indispensable part of a whole; essential."
The reference to Wuthering Heights seems contrived and a little silly - we know William loves Buffy intensely, you don't need to use literary references to emphasize that, as you're doing a fine job describing his feelings on your own!
A couple more corrections: Sure, one could take care of oneself well enough, but... He'd mistaken her exuberance for making love with him for love...
Author's Response: Thank you. I don't think it hurts to use literary references to get your point across. Even if you can describe it well enough on your own. Especially with such an intense story as Wuthering Heights
Author's Response: I thank you for pointing out my mistakes, I am human and it happens. Was there anything you liked about the chapter?
Date: 08/19/2006 - 08:26 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
William needs to be the strong one here, he has to keep Buffy, don't give her up even if she wants it (to prevent to get hurt). If he can do that they'll have a chance. And I think they have... Because the love is there on both sides. (loved the update)
Date: 08/19/2006 - 05:31 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
I loved reading William's perspective of what's going on between him and Buffy. It's so sad to see William and Buffy hurting like this. I'm really looking forward to finding out what happens in the morning when they wake up. Great chapter!
Date: 08/19/2006 - 05:26 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
poor babies!!! i feel so sorry for the both of them but ireaally loved this chapter. please post soon.
Date: 08/19/2006 - 05:05 am Title: Chapter Thirty five
What a treat to read 3 chapters in a row! I missed your story while the site was down. At any rate-- big drama. I'm glad William came clean about Dru, since you can't hide big secrets and have a releationship. Looking foward to actually making contact with the ghosts. Hopefully, Buffy will let everyone in soon.