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Reviewer: smlcspike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 07/17/2007 - 04:50 pm Title: Joyce Remembers

OH that was interesting, so is Buffy with Spike now or is he just visiting.

Reviewer: jamies_lady Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2007 - 11:28 am Title: Joyce Remembers

wonderful, am really looking forward to where this is going,
my only critasism is that there are a couple of spelling mistakes and i suggest a beta.

Reviewer: cordykitten Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/03/2007 - 05:58 pm Title: Joyce Remembers

Oh I'm glad you fixed the spacing! I took a look yesterday and well almost unreadable. I've heart that another author had problems too updating with a Mac computer. It's a lot better this way :-D
Good to see that Giles spoke about his feelings for Joyce. And nice present Spike got for them... but not in the way he said he did. Loved the little history of Spike.
And there is even more! Another secret... so Giles (his family) is to protect Spike (I guess he is 'the one' Giles was looking for).
And me, I'm looking forward to read the next part :)

Reviewer: Jenn Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/03/2007 - 01:10 am Title: Joyce Remembers

I liked your story alot but i did have trouble reading it but i think that this has a lot of poetential and i think once you find a beta to help you out i think that will make the story even better. i'm not trying to be mean or anything in fact from what i read i really liked it alot.

Reviewer: Spiked_Slayer Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 03:27 pm Title: Joyce Remembers

kinda coulndn't read it all, spaces please. from what i read good though.

Reviewer: Blazing Fire Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 03:01 pm Title: Joyce Remembers

I can't read this as written. You really need to break this down into paragraphs that can be easily read. For one thing. You have to make a new paragraph after each person speaks, otherwise you get a jumbled up mess that no one can read.

Please edit this and I would be happy to read.

I'm not trying to flame you, I just can't read it.

Reviewer: Blazing Fire Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 02:59 pm Title: Joyce Remembers

I can't read this as written. You really need to break this down into paragraphs that can be easily read. For one thing. You have to make a new paragraph after each person speaks, otherwise you get a jumbled up mess that no one can read.

Please edit this and I would be happy to read.

I'm not trying to flame you, I just can't read it.

Reviewer: Bernardette Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 12:57 pm Title: Joyce Remembers

Great start. Looking forward to reading more.

Reviewer: spuffy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 11:29 am Title: Joyce Remembers

mmm look its seems like a very nice story but the wat u post it its very unreadable u need to use more space between lines and sentences. its very hard to read it like that

Reviewer: Danni Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 08:10 am Title: Joyce Remembers

This is a good start, a little hard to read because of the no spacing between paragraphs but a good fic.

Reviewer: kw Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 05:50 am Title: Joyce Remembers

Great start, the plot line is unique, I just hope the spacing is better next time so it is easier to read

Reviewer: K Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 05:32 am Title: Joyce Remembers

That's a really mean way to make what could be a helpful suggesstion. I am sure the writer takes the writing very seriosuly. Maybe it was a site or a simple coding error. Or maybe the person is not familiar with how to post fics, etc. If you can't find a nicer way to say things then I think you should take your words elswhere. I read the chapter and the premise and idea was wonderful. My advice to the writer, which is what I believe you were trying to give... would be to seek a beta. I used to write fic, and they are valuable assets to any great story. I think this one has the potential to be something wonderful, and having a second pair of eyes is always helpful. If you aren't familiar with how to post and coding, etc, maybe ask a veteran from this site for help. I look forward to seeing more of this fic in the future!

Reviewer: J Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 05:27 am Title: Joyce Remembers

The story itself is interesting but it's a little hard to read due to the formatting and I got lost a couple of times. I finally had to copy the story and fix the formatting problem myself to follow the work.

May I suggest breaking it up a bit into paragraphs, sections, conversations, ect?

I will be watching for the second part to see how this idea is going to evolve =) but it's nice to see Spike getting a little well earned recognition for what he's trying to become.

Reviewer: ??? Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/02/2007 - 05:00 am Title: Joyce Remembers

wow, i can't believe this got validated. how do you expect anyone to read this without their eyes hurting? it's all one huge paragraph. you really need to take your writing more seriously and have some decent spacing or no one will even bother.

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