Date: 09/21/2007 - 01:50 pm Title: Must be tuesday. Or not.
Good start, looking forward to read more! :)
Author's Response: Thanks :) I'm gonna write two new chapts before posting though!
Date: 09/18/2007 - 03:32 pm Title: Must be tuesday. Or not.
What Pat meant was stuff like that: I broke this into sentences ... or I added the codes ...
That doesn't sound as if it belongs here. Sounds as if you posted the wrong version here, the one you've got back from your beta it seems to me. ~
I like the start of this one; looking forward where you will go with it (what comes next).
Author's Response: Its updated now, I'm soo sorry about that, I shouldnt of posted it whilst i have this terrible cold ! xx
Date: 09/18/2007 - 12:00 pm Title: Must be tuesday. Or not.
A good start. I would suggest taking out the little notes regarding your writing process that are in the text of the story though. They take the reader out of the story and make it a bit hard to read. Other than that, keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thanks, but what do you mean>?xx