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Reviewer: Minna Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/09/2008 - 09:13 pm Title: Chapter Eight

I love it.. I know who Susan is.. ;).. Anyway, keep writing and soon please.

Oh, yeah! Almost forgot.. :P I think you wrote a little wrong at one place, or then I didn't just get it :P.. 'Cause you wrote that Janice is the stomping nurse, then that she's the tip toeing nurse.. here it is:

"Come on deary, lets get you to your room." Nurse Janice whispered. Janice had been Buffy's nurse last night, the one that stomped into the room.

"Are you my nurse tonight?" Buffy asked, hoping she wasn't. She wanted to sleep. Not listen to stomping every hour.

"Sorry deary. You have Nurse Jill." Buffy just Thanked God, Janice was the one who tippy toed.


Love, Minna

Author's Response: thanks for catching that...It should have said Jill tippy toed.

Reviewer: smlcspike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/09/2008 - 06:38 pm Title: Chapter Eight

OH I hope that puts Hank in his place for some reason I do not believe it will.

I talk it that Susan was her aunt wonder what her fiamily will say when they see her again.

Author's Response: it should happen in the next chapter if everything goes the way I want it..and I won't take as long for the next chapter

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