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Reviewer: clo Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/13/2009 - 12:36 am Title: Un

hey! i like the story (it's very cute!) but if you care not all of the french was correct. here is what i saw:
good luck is "bonne chance"
"i don't want you to fall" is "je ne veux pas que vous vous tombez" (the vous is repeated because it's reflexive)
and i think you were going for "excuse me but could you" but you can just say "excusez-moi mais pouvez-vous..." which is "excuse me but can you" and it makes more sense.

Author's Response: Yea I actually speak French. But thanks for your edits. It's been a while since ice actually used my skills and obviously they're lacking. So thanks!! Cheers :)

Reviewer: Stargazer Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/12/2009 - 08:04 pm Title: Un

Hey, great start and I'm looking forward to reading more. Just one little thing. I notice that Spike said:
"[I'm from] Sheffield. It's near London."
I just wanted to let you know that Sheffield is actually 3 hours away from London - A good 200 miles.
It's actually nearer cities like Birmingham and Manchester.

Just my useless UK knowledge for you. I have to make that journey twice a year - it's nowhere near London, by British standards. :)

Author's Response: Thanks. I guess my geography is a bit off. But hey at least I didn't say Glasgow or something. ;) Thanks for your encouragement. The second chapter should be up soon. Cheers :)

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/10/2009 - 09:29 pm Title: Un

Great beginning! Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/09/2009 - 06:32 pm Title: Un

wow, yeah, you really need a beta.

Reviewer: cordykitten Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/09/2009 - 05:39 pm Title: Un

*nods* A beta is very helpful. You don't make a difference between buffy and Buffy etc.; makes it harder to read.
Besides that - a good start. I like the twist. Evil of Spike to blast his music so loud. *gg*

Author's Response: Thanks. And yes, I do realize i forgot to use capitals. That's one of the problems of writing it on an iPod. :) I'm going to go through it again and fix it then repost it. But thank you for your help

Reviewer: RB Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/09/2009 - 07:15 am Title: Un

Good start, but you might want to get a beta. You can find a link for them in the menu of this site. It's difficult to read a story with grammatical errors. Looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Yes, I'm sorry about the problems with it. I'm going to go through it and fix it then repost it. Thank you though for your encouragement :)

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