Date: 08/13/2009 - 06:55 pm Title: Chapter One
Hmm.. a little curious about the guy at the start..
and Buffy and Spike together without him knowing about the guy.. hmmm
Gonna read more now, liking story so far;)
Date: 05/04/2009 - 02:08 am Title: Chapter One
OMG my heart broke for Buffy it that moment and clearly Spike doesn't know what's been happening i hope she can open up to him.
Date: 05/01/2009 - 05:00 am Title: Chapter One
lol
“That’s never safe” Buffy grinned at his glare.
I love that lol. Great chapter. I cant wait to virtually smack around the bloody tosser who is behind the rape tho! Must read more!
Date: 04/08/2009 - 03:20 am Title: Chapter One
ooooooo I hope he gets a healthy dose of Dead. ZOMG write moar!
Date: 04/01/2009 - 02:52 am Title: Chapter One
Strong start. Spike's going to have a fit when he finds out what she's hiding from him.
You mentioned it's unbeta'd, so thought you might like to know about one inconsistency that I noticed: in the first para you write, "Taking one last look over her nude form he stepped out...." In the next para you write, "She hurriedly shed the over-sized t-shirt she had been wearing, balling it up and tossing it towards the garbage can."
Thanks for posting. Looking forward to more!
Date: 04/01/2009 - 02:52 am Title: Chapter One
Yikes! This fic is definitely deep and dark. You really "went there" in chapter 1. Just wanted to let you know that I think it has potential. I get the feeling that Spike has no idea what's going on and will surely blow a gasket when he finds out because I don't think they're intimate yet. This seems like it was the escalating tipping-point event of Buffy's abuse with the sheet stain. Hope you get a beta to help you with story development--it will be a better story for having a beta.
Date: 04/01/2009 - 02:21 am Title: Chapter One
Oh my, I am so glad buffy has Spike to help through the tough time. I fear though that she is just hiding that it actually happened from her and Spike. I hope for more soon.
Date: 04/01/2009 - 02:19 am Title: Chapter One
love it so far...cant wait to see more =)
Date: 04/01/2009 - 02:18 am Title: Chapter One
Jake, you made me see I'm guessing John Ritter raping Buffy in my head.. ewwwww, but well done ;) keep going. Cant wait to see where this goes
Date: 04/01/2009 - 01:51 am Title: Chapter One
i LIKE THIS CANT WAIT TO SEE WERE YOU TAKE IT