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Reviewer: Mooseshug Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02/10/2011 - 02:20 am Title: One

Love this story, hope you are still working on it? Can't wait to see how it turns out...please please please?

Reviewer: Crystal Pegasus Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 05/11/2010 - 12:37 am Title: One

You have kept me laughing and moaning at tyhe hotness throughout this fic. I love it! Thank you for sharing and I look forward to the next bit. I know that tall dark and forehead is going to be right up Buffy's usual alley guy wise and I know that William will be very insecure. I just hope buffy realizes she has the best sibling and should keep him. Thanks again.

Reviewer: Shell Presto Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/15/2009 - 09:04 am Title: One

Gotta say I'm a fan of the final version. It has all your original spunk and witty observations of Buffy the author, but now with better flow and more necessary details. I especially like the improved flow on the confrontation between Mr. Pratt. I hope the second meeting is as humbling as the first was heated and embarassing. Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: Kim Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/12/2009 - 11:50 am Title: One

Definitely enjoying this story so far. Have to say was disappointed to hear you made up the island, sounds like it would have been a wonderful place to visit. Should have known was too good to be true, lol. Can't wait for more.

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/11/2009 - 11:56 pm Title: One

I'm loving this already! Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: Sam Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/11/2009 - 11:59 am Title: One

OK trying to post a review for the second time now.

I nearly didn't bother reading because I am not a huge fan of stories written in the first person. I am so glad I tried because I thought that was a great beginning. Really looking forward to more and to Buffy's next meeting with Mr. Pratt!

Reviewer: Henri Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/11/2009 - 11:32 am Title: One

Very interesting start, looking forward to seeing where this is going. I was wondering if that Island was made up :D

Reviewer: P Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/10/2009 - 11:54 am Title: One

Souinds as if real life could lead to an interesting new book .

Promised?

Reviewer: B Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/10/2009 - 07:15 am Title: One

You write a lovely first person story, but I personally still like to read in third person. I think it's because that way you get a view into all the characters heads. I find myself always wondering what other characters are thinking which you can't always tell using first person narrative. Great start.

Reviewer: guest Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/10/2009 - 06:57 am Title: One

Great start. Buffy was such a bitch to William. Very much like the way she was on the show too. Just because a couple of men have hurt her doesn't mean she had a right to take it out of another man. There are some men that jerks. There are some women who are bitches and who likes to use men for material things. Doesn't mean that all men and women are bad. I feel bad for William. He was only trying to help. He got his bite off because of it. I'm sure William is all man too not a little boy. wink, wink

Reviewer: BuffyRat Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/10/2009 - 01:22 am Title: One

I think your bout with writing in first person is going quite well. And her rage at men is not only well spoken but quite humorous. Very enjoyable. And I love the way Joyce is helping out. Looking forward to her apology. Please, update soon.

Reviewer: Bridget Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/09/2009 - 05:20 pm Title: One

I love your story so far and I think you are doing great writing in first person. I can't wait to read the next chapter..

Reviewer: marta Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08/09/2009 - 03:46 pm Title: One

I love it so far. The first person narrative gives the story a nice intimacy.

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Date: 08/09/2009 - 02:55 pm Title: One

Oh that's an interesting twist (and I think the 'first person' works well because of the twist). Buffy was very lucky to find out before she married Riley what a man he was.
And now this thing is even influence her business.
And what an explosion... a not so good first meeting between William and Buffy. Apologizing sounds good and she got a good tip how to do so. . :)
Good start, looking forward to more!

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