Date: 12/08/2009 - 01:50 am Title: Curse
Wow, I like this. Keep it coming.
Date: 12/07/2009 - 10:22 pm Title: Curse
Too bad - Buffy just found Spike and now he's gone.
Hope you'll bring him back.
Date: 12/07/2009 - 06:33 pm Title: Curse
Wonderful story. Please continue?
Date: 12/07/2009 - 11:17 am Title: Curse
god that was so freakingly tragic and yet beautiful... please keep up the updates im really enjoying this!!!!
XO
Date: 12/07/2009 - 01:18 am Title: Curse
Great concept for a story. Please continue it is very interesting and this chapter was heartbreaking.
Date: 12/07/2009 - 01:08 am Title: Curse
The moment of Buffy and Spike's meeting is wonderful and poignant. I love seeing Buffy's maturity and pain written so simply in her thoughts. You captured the feelings so well, and I love the idea of her reading William's journals. His Victorian voice but rich with feeling like Spike was perfect. The first two chapters have been so wonderful I hope to read more, though the Spike/Other warning has me worried.
I was a little unclear with Spike's death scene. "It slid through Spike like warm butter" Do you mean the dragon did? The dragon's mouth? Or did spike kill himself with his sword and that was part of the tortured smile? if it's the dragon, does Spike turn toward Buffy, unaware of the dragon, to smile and pull his sword close? Or does he turn to face the dragon, but not have time to fight it? Or does he turn to face it but just allow it to slide through him, somehow...
All in all, a wonderful beginning.
Author's Response: That's actually good! I meant the dragon, and my beta and I struggled over that forever ago. So when he read it when I rewrote it, he said it still lacked something, but had no idea how I should phrase it. I just might use that! And thank you. I have had this between two computers now for almost 4 years, and it's nice that I can go back to it, rework it a little and make it work so someone can enjoy it!