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Date: 12/21/2010 - 12:08 pm Title: Chapter 13-Dawn's Day

Absolutely not! Your Riley is a passive aggressive jerk. It's understandable that Dawn is angry, and that she wants to live with her dad, but for Dawn's sake he should have encouraged her to at least listen to her mother's side of things. But Riley aside, I'm enjoying this story. You write conflict very well and your characterizations are excellent.

Author's Response: Thank you! Is Riley really a passive aggressive jerk? He was on the show, but I thought in this story he was a bit more understandable. I guess I wasn't doing a very good job. But thank you for the kind words and glad you're enjoying the story!

Reviewer: albie Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/21/2010 - 11:14 am Title: Chapter 13-Dawn's Day

Okay, I should have been sleeping, but instead I just gobbled up this story in one big gulp. Wonderfully written story with literary references? What a fantastic find!

Dawn reacted the way I expected and well, as much as I sympathized with Riley in this chapter, I can't help but not fall for him and still be on Buffy's side. I don't think presenting this united front of kicking Buffy out of her own own was the way to go about things. Dawn may be part of the hurt party, but she's not an adult and I feel like this paves the way for Dawn to stomp on everything as if she's not Buffy's daughter. She does deserve the injured party leeway, of course, but I didn't like Riley's threat or Dawn's bratty triumph. And...it IS Buffy's house, which kinda seemed low as well.

But I get the motivations, of course, and it was , again, wonderfully written. I imagine we'll see more of Dawn's acting out in school as well, but I do hope and think that eventually some kind of understanding will be met amongst the group. Buffy messed up, no doubt, stuck that final nail into her marriage with a firm slam, but she's still Dawn's mom

Clearly, I really look forward to more.

Author's Response: Thank you for the comment! And thank you for saying the story was wonderfully written, that was really kind. I agree the united front was painful and I was trying to echo the moment when she gets thrown out at the end of season 7. I wasn't trying to get you to not be on Buffy's side, I just meant he really steps up for Dawn and he's there for her when she needs him.

Reviewer: Sam Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/21/2010 - 10:26 am Title: Chapter 13-Dawn's Day

Loved the extra long update - thank you - but have to say there was no falling for Riley. Nope, not a bit.

Author's Response: Yeah, the kicking out part was awful, but I mean the discussion in Dawn's room. I guess I failed, because I was trying to really make you understand what Buffy was giving up there.

Reviewer: Marta Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/21/2010 - 10:21 am Title: Chapter 13-Dawn's Day

This story is soo good I love it! Can't wait for the next chapter :)

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: demona424 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/21/2010 - 05:40 am Title: Chapter 8-Sunday

I am loving this story! Great chapter. So sexy, sweet, and heartbreaking all in one. Not sure how they're going to resolve their issues but I can't wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Glad you like it! Thanks for the comment.

Reviewer: behind blue eyes Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/21/2010 - 05:29 am Title: Chapter 10-Tainted Love

So much pain from Buffy not telling Spike and Riley her true feelings. I hope she will realize soon that all it takes is the truth, it may at first hurt, but in the end it does set you free. Looking forward to more

Author's Response: Hope you like the way the story begins to resolve, thanks for your comments and for reading it!

Reviewer: behind blue eyes Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/21/2010 - 05:19 am Title: Chapter 9-Lovely Light

So sad...on to the next chapter

Author's Response: Sorry to make you sad, but thank you for reading!

Reviewer: ace Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/20/2010 - 08:47 pm Title: Chapter 8-Sunday

I see only tragedy ahead. Can't help but love the oncoming trainwreck...

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/20/2010 - 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 8-Sunday

GAH! This story is so incredibly hot and so devestatingly sad at the same time. It makes my morning bus commute to work a bit more bearable.

I love how you've quoted The Cure. TS Eliot. My favorite band an poet. Its like this story was made for me, really.

I guess it's only a matter of time before they get caught...

Author's Response: That is amazing praise! Thank you. I've always wanted to write something that makes somebody else say "this story was made for me." I think that's why everybody picks up a pen or starts clacking away at a keyboard. Thank you.

Reviewer: behind blue eyes Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/20/2010 - 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 8-Sunday

fabulous chapter, filled with steamy sex, battling feelings, and angst. Really enjoyed!

Author's Response: So glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Nana Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/19/2010 - 05:13 am Title: Chapter 7-Slow Bleed

I understand her need for sex, she is young and had a lifetime to fulfill that need until her husband was injured. I feel both are cheating themselves by not out in the open with their love. Her husband might hurt for a bit although it would be one less item in his life to deal with.
The time is coming when it will be revealed to everyone and they will have no supporters for their love.

Wonderful insightful story!

Author's Response: Thank you for the comment! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

Reviewer: Becky Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/18/2010 - 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 7-Slow Bleed

More please!

Author's Response: As you wish.

Reviewer: Becky Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/18/2010 - 12:40 am Title: Chapter 7-Slow Bleed

Loving the story more and more...

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Becky Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2010 - 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 4-The First and the Third

I see a glimmer of Season 6 Spiffy in this. At least, the shame Buffy felt at using Spike and the sadness Spike felt because he always wanted more.

Truly, I'm smitten with this story. Do keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you for the comments. Everything I write seems to have a Season 6 vibe, even though five is my favorite. Glad you like it!

Reviewer: Becky Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2010 - 04:20 pm Title: Chapter 3-Many Pies

I love Dan Savage. He gives good advice. He lives down the street from me, actually. And open relationships are very common here in Seattle...not my thing, but to each their own.

I'm really enjoying this story so far. You're a great writer. Have you thought about creating an LJ? You could get your stories out to more of the fandom that way.

Author's Response: My brother-in-law lives in Seattle! I'm glad you're enjoying the story and I'm super-flattered that you like my writing. I haven't really thought about Live Journal, I'm kind of new to all this. Thanks for the advice.

Reviewer: workNprogress Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2010 - 09:01 am Title: Chapter 1 - Mrs. Buffy Anne Finn

I like the hesistancy and the blunt honesty between the characters here. Please post soon, can't wait for more. Great job.

Author's Response: Thank you! I was hoping it felt realistic.

Reviewer: Becky Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2010 - 02:43 am Title: Chapter 2- Feasting on the Crumb

Pretentious literary references rule.

Author's Response: Glad you like them, as I stated before I'm still on a payment plan for them. Plus as a reader, you get the added bonus of enjoying some actual decent writing mixed in with filthy, filthy sex scenes.

Reviewer: Becky Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2010 - 02:34 am Title: Chapter 1 - Mrs. Buffy Anne Finn

SEXY! I'm intrigued to see what happens next.

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you like it.

Reviewer: Behind Blue Eyes Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2010 - 01:51 am Title: Chapter 7-Slow Bleed

*squeal* That comment was made on another story. It was so great you were able to use it here! It made me smile ;) This chapter was great! I could totally picture a naked Spike trying to wrangle Sunshine into the crate! That part made me giggle. HEHE! On a sadder note, Buffy realizing she loved him, but at the same time pushed his away. Great chapter, looking forward to more!

Author's Response: I couldn't work that image into the story associated with your original comment, but I loved it just the same. Glad you found the nude dog wrangling funny, I can never tell if stuff that makes me laugh is working. Thank you for sticking with this piece!

Reviewer: a Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2010 - 01:48 am Title: Chapter 7-Slow Bleed

Not normally my cuppa, infidelity fic, but you've made them so compelling and real. I feel for them, even while feeling sorry for Riley, and especially Dawn.

Author's Response: Glad you could relate to them. The infidelity is less about naughtiness and more about missed chances, if that makes sense. Thank you for the comment!

Reviewer: ace Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2010 - 01:15 am Title: Chapter 7-Slow Bleed

Wanted you to know how much I am enjoying this story and your telling of it. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Thanks so much, that means the world to me.

Reviewer: SpikesGirl Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/14/2010 - 03:56 am Title: Chapter 6-Pinned and Wriggling

so glad u updated so fast. really liking the story. i am so into it.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! Hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Reviewer: behind blue eyes Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/13/2010 - 04:51 pm Title: Chapter 4-The First and the Third

when I said "they" I meant Buffy and Riley. There are so many other ways to be initmate with someone, Riley's just choosing to shut down completely instead of exploring them with her. I agree with you completely!

Author's Response: Sorry to get all over-explainy. Sometimes when I write, I can be overwhelmingly vague because hey, it's clear to me because it's in my brain. Thanks for your comments and for sticking with the story.

Reviewer: Behind Blue Eyes Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/13/2010 - 03:33 pm Title: Chapter 4-The First and the Third

Great chapter! It makes sense that Buffy is trying to justify her being with Spike by only allowing oral sex. It seems she's trying to say, in her own mind, even though Riley is in a wheelchair they could still be intimate. I believe that once she let's Spike inside (both figuratively and emotionally) it will become more real. Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: Actually, she and Riley could still be intimate, he just can't handle it emotionally. It's sort of a reference to the series where he didn't feel he was man enough for her without the Initiative enhancements. I know some guys with spinal chord injuries can still have erections, some can't, but I didn't want to get into the nature of his injury, so he's just shut down to sex. This story is partly inspired by the Pedro Almadovar movie, 'Live Flesh.'

Reviewer: total geek Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/13/2010 - 10:25 am Title: Chapter 4-The First and the Third

i really liking the progression of this fic i think its going in an interesting direction... oh i forgot to say last time i love a the ref to Morrissey im a pretty huge fan of his music (plus i live in the same city that he hails from) perfect music for walking through manchester in the rain *sings 'girlfriend in a coma' very badly*

Author's Response: Morrissey is fantastic. For some reason this particular story has lots of stuff from my college days, and Morrissey was a huge part of that. Thank you for reading this and for leaving comments!

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