[Report This]Date: 03/02/2013 - 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 16
Nooooooooo! George?! Really?! Do I hate you for killing one of my favorites? No. But I do have the urge to shoot you with an airsoft gun. And don't be fooled! Those little plastic bbs sting!
Author's Response: I tried to avoid it! Well, you read my notes :( I loved George!
[Report This]Date: 04/24/2012 - 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 16
I can't believe George died. This completely broke my heart as I came to adore his character so, so much. Even though it made me cry (you're not the only dork here), I applaud you for going through with it because I know it must have been a struggle.
Author's Response: He was hard to kill. And I'm so glad that you understand! Thanks for your words
[Report This]Date: 01/24/2012 - 03:54 am Title: Chapter 16
I had to try not to cry when I read this!! I loved George.
Author's Response: Thanks. I got misty when the captain placed his hand on George and called him "dear boy." That wasn't in the first draft and then on reread it hit me that the captain would want an informal moment and something more genuine.
[Report This]Date: 01/18/2012 - 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 16
Hey, as one of the people who read this chapter before it went to post, I thought I ought to weigh in on the leggy controversy.
The image was jarring and disorienting, but intentionally so. It takes you a second to think about it before the sentence makes sense. Grammar Police-if you thought this could be stated in a more elegant way, then that's your right. There was no need for the sarcasm, though. Sharing writing is such a frightening process anyway, one that makes the author vulnerable. Obviously, this isn't a professional forum and you've got a lot of people writing for a lot of reasons. In short, criticism is important, but I'd urge you to please be nice next time you don't like something.
Author's Response: Case in point. Minx just schooled someone in how to be nice, but she did it in a NICE way!
I adore criticism. It's how I improve. But ya know what I love even more? Common decency!
[Report This]Date: 01/17/2012 - 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 16
I'll miss you, George!
Author's Response: In the AU of this AU - Jenny has dumped Silent Jack and met George on her way to America. They fall madly in love and set up a little farm in Pennsylvania. Later, he brings his mum and sisters over. It's awesome!
[Report This]Date: 01/17/2012 - 01:36 pm Title: Chapter 16
What word popped into my mind after I read some of the comments? Rice pudding! The perfect solution to pompous uncles and other bragadocious people.
Author's Response: Proof once again that there ain't no problem that food can't handle :D
[Report This]Date: 01/15/2012 - 11:38 pm Title: Chapter 16
I hate to have to do this on an author's review page but what I've read on it has really bothered me.
Grammar Police, I don't want you to feel attacked here, but I think the way you phrased your comments was disrespectful and not at all constructive criticism. I felt that the phrasing and the use of exclamation marks stressing your point came off as sarcastic, condescending and rude.
Secondly I think that despite your argument to the contrary, your original review did criticize the author's beta readers. "Five people read this and not a single one spotted that! Good job!" I would love to know how else this could be perceived as to me it seems like a clear dig at everyone who read the chapter and approved it.
I would also like to point out that just because people are responding the way they are under aliases does not mean it is the author. She has responded to your review and made her point. I don't think she needs to pretend to be a variety of anonymous characters just to get back at you. It's unnecessary and the fact that you review anonymously should say something about throwing stones.
Okay, this was a long review that had nothing to do with the chapter but I felt the need to express an opinion since I am not used to seeing this sort of thing and it annoys me that this carry on happens in an environment that should be creative and fun.
Wolf out.
Author's Response: I don't know how to respond to this. Go wolf. How's that?
Date: 01/15/2012 - 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 16
First, I would like to clarify. I was not picking on your betas. I was only talking about you. I’ve been following your work for some time, and I have noticed when you receive any reviews that do not praise or gush over your work, you attack. If this is how you treat your reviewers, I can’t imagine how you react to your betas when their job is to fix and improve your work. Obviously, you don’t respect them enough to listen, since your stuff is clearly riddled with mistakes.
Second, as for the initial reason I reviewed. Regardless of the context the sentence is still grammatical incorrect! Plain and simple!
“William’s legs ran towards the door, for which he was grateful. His mind was disengaged, and it was no small mercy that the rest of him was alert enough to act.”
It is not possible for one’s legs to run to the door on their own!
Now if you said:
“William hurried towards the door as fast as his legs would carry him, for which he was grateful.”
Why this is correct:
William is the subject, hurried is the verb, and legs is the direct object because they receive the direct action, carry.
This sentence is still within your context. But it doesn’t imply William’s legs had a brain separate from the rest of his body, giving him instructions, as your sentence does. I understand you’re writing fantasy, but come on!
I hope you don’t make up any more reviews to defend your position.
Author's Response: I'm not attacking, but having a ridiculous amount of silly fun. I look so forward to our exchanges. Although I can tell you don't share my sense of humor - I'm having such fun, and you're feeling instructional. I say it's a win-win. ---- Your recent dissertation contains the following: "Regardless of the context the sentence is still grammatical incorrect!" I suspect that you intended to say "grammatically" incorrect. To show you that there are no hard feelings, I'm willing to beta your future correspondence with me. I would offer the use of my betas (who are seriously fantastic) but that wouldn't really be my place. Instead, I'm here for ya GP! Willing to help. Let me know! -- Your friend, Puddin'
[Report This]Date: 01/14/2012 - 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 16
That stupid bitch! I can't believe I went to all the trouble of pulling of my "Shining Man" routine and she listens to that porcelain brat instead! *smacks head*
Well at least that twerp is gone. If I had to see any more of his eager lapdog act I was gonna hurl.
Way to go grammar police! At least I know you're always on my side. The PTWB are always looking for new recruits. What do you say?
Author's Response: Nice to see you again Warren. Can you be my Official Imp? You know, like sports teams have a mascot?
Your Warren voice is spot-on too! I stand in awe. Have you considered writing poetry? I'm thinking something epic...
[Report This]Date: 01/14/2012 - 04:48 pm Title: Chapter 16
William’s legs ran towards the door, for which he was grateful. His mind was disengaged, and it was no small mercy that the rest of him was alert enough to act.
----- Wow Grammar Police. You need to look a little harder for your fuel next time.
Author's Response: Hey, to her credit - it takes a lot of work to take things out of context. "Grammar Police's reviews are awfully entertaining" can be turned into "Grammar Police's reviews are awful." That takes effort!
Date: 01/14/2012 - 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 16
"William’s legs ran towards the door"--Humanly impossible! I hope the rest of him went to the door as well! Five people read this, and not a one caught this mistake! Nice work!
Author's Response: Ah. Perhaps you missed that bit about him being "detatched from his body." The parts where he was like a "kite" and it was "like watching a play."
Apparently you missed that and I find myself to blame. I only put that detail in twice and should have gone for three times.
And ...? Humanity Police says "Don't go after a person's betas. It's tackier than Harmony at a '50% Off All Unicorns' sale."
[Report This]Date: 01/14/2012 - 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 16
Really enjooying your story.
Rest in peace George! Your death was not in vain. Buffy and William will ensure your death is properly handled. The Slayer will emerge again to catch your killer and save William.
Author's Response: Thanks lilpuff! All George-love makes me feel happy. In my AU of this AU George and Jenny (from the last story) are living on a farm in Ohio :)
Date: 01/14/2012 - 04:13 am Title: Chapter 16
RIP George. Truly the only one other than our two that could garner such a reaction. But bad things do happen to good people, and for such an event to so knock Buffy down off her self, well, it may surprise both of them what they can become, in general and to each other. Perhaps this will show them that they need each other. Update soon!
Author's Response: I think this will spin out in surprising ways - as these things tend to do. And, when people are open to it, positive things can come about.
Ambiguous much Puddin? ;)
[Report This]Date: 01/14/2012 - 04:04 am Title: Chapter 16
Killing George was brave and definately brought tears to my eyes. Bravo! Not only do I feel for George, but also for the guilt that Buffy and also William will carry over his untimely demise. I often have fights with my muse - he has a bloodlust (and a sadistic streak) that won't end and I must rein him in at times, but this was a wonderful chapter full of angst! I love angst!
Author's Response: Thanks P4S. Someone on the EF chatbox said I wrote "fluff" the other day. I was like... "huh?" But I guess one woman's fluff is another woman's chipotle.
Hopefully with this chapter behind the story will take the turn I've been longing for
Date: 01/13/2012 - 10:36 pm Title: Chapter 16
It takes a lot for me to really appreciate a non-canon character, but George was one of them. I kinda knew from the get-go what his future would bring, but I really enjoyed the oomph he brought to this story.
R.I,P.,Georgie. (An homage to a much beloved character in a Stephen King story,)
Nikki
Author's Response: Thanks so much Nikki. It means a lot. I was shocked at my feelings toward George and felt terribly corny about them - but there you go. (I also adore Stephen King and am loving his book "On Writing" which I got for Christmas!)
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