Date: 10/05/2007 - 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 3
oh wow...really interesting...
Date: 04/02/2006 - 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 3
What a cliff hanger plus really wierd one too i cant wait to see what happens next some fights maybesome major drama coming up love the fic so far definetely recommend the first chapter
Date: 06/07/2005 - 11:19 pm Title: Chapter 3
hay doing very good lovin it
Date: 06/04/2005 - 05:24 am Title: Chapter 3
Dum dum dum....can't wait to find out what happens next. Good chapter.
Date: 06/03/2005 - 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 3
Sorryt hat last review didn't come out like I had hope let me try again please, as far as spacing out the dialouge: “Ugh, fine.” She storms to the door and throws it open. She hold it open. “Alright come in, William.” Spike nods. “Thanks.” He walks over to a chair and sits down. Buffy walks back to her bed and picks up her book. “Ugh, fine.” She storms to the door and throws it open. She hold it open. “Alright come in, William.” Spike nods. “Thanks.” He walks over to a chair and sits down. Buffy walks back to her bed and picks up her book. ok I hope that looks better, if not then please delete this :)
Date: 06/03/2005 - 03:42 pm Title: Chapter 3
Whoa ok I didn't see that coming at all...Interesting twist. And describing angel as mr. Forehead, class, it can never be overdone :D Got me on the edge of my seat here. I just have one tiny criticism, i think your story would flow a bit better if you give each person their own paragraph, like space it out, example: “Ugh, fine.” She storms to the door and throws it open. She hold it open. “Alright come in, William.” Spike nods. “Thanks.” He walks over to a chair and sits down. Buffy walks back to her bed and picks up her book. Flows better like this: “Ugh, fine.” She storms to the door and throws it open. She hold it open. “Alright come in, William.” Spike nods. “Thanks.” He walks over to a chair and sits down. Buffy walks back to her bed and picks up her book. Overall great writing and wonderful storytelling, now off tot he next chappy:)
Date: 04/01/2005 - 03:34 am Title: Chapter 3
Wow... I just keep on wanting to read! I just can't stop It is like a drug
Date: 03/14/2005 - 02:31 am Title: Chapter 3
This is a great story i can not wait to read more
Date: 03/14/2005 - 02:13 am Title: Chapter 3
Excellent story, I realy love the whole shy blushing buffy and the bad ass spike. Keep up the good work.