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Reviewer: MarstersGirl13 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/08/2006 - 02:32 pm Title: Finding Lost Passion

ohhhhh no.
you cannot stop theree!!!! that is so evil of you.
gr.
update like now maybe??? haha please. =]

Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/08/2006 - 01:49 pm Title: Finding Lost Passion

evil cliffhanger more please

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Date: 01/08/2006 - 09:44 am Title: The Bronze

love it"!!!! please update!

Reviewer: Lizzie Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/08/2006 - 07:18 am Title: The Bronze

Buffy is being so unfair. Why is it ok for her to be with Angel and Spike isn't allowed to fool around with Faith?
The same rules have to be applied to Spike you get to be with Angel then Spike can be with someone else and if Buffy doens't like it she shouldn't be with Angel. I hate it when girls act so selfish and spoiled. I hope Spike does calls her on it.

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2006 - 04:34 pm Title: The Bronze

Really great chapter! Love it! More please!

Reviewer: samanatha Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2006 - 03:33 pm Title: The Bronze

i love how everyone is like "more more" and i know whats gonna happen cause this is your real life. its great. cant wait to read more! keep up the good work!

~*samantha*~

Reviewer: Nicki Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2006 - 03:24 pm Title: The Bronze

Ohhh, she so needs to decide!

Reviewer: marstersgirl13 Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2006 - 02:41 pm Title: The Bronze

wonderful!

Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2006 - 02:16 pm Title: The Bronze

more please

Reviewer: DaniD Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2006 - 01:29 am Title: Spiders

Think it's best she told him she loves him..
Good update!

Reviewer: Mac 1 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 06:29 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

And the later chapters with more paragraph breaks are much better, but you are still combining dialogue within one paragraph. In fiction, every time a character speaks, it must be in it's own paragraph. You cannot have two characters' dialogue in one paragraph. It is not only bad form but is confusing to the reader, as movement, gesture, emotion - all of it - become mixed together and it is difficult to know which character did or thought or gestured what. This story is still very early in it's writing so it is not unreasonable to go back and re-format the paragraphs from the beginning so that they read properly and then continue on correctly. If you don't do this you are consigning all your hard work to being dismissed as poorly written and not worth bothering with overall. I don't think you want that and I don't think your story deserves that either. Thanks.

Reviewer: Mac 1 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 06:21 pm Title: Introductions/ Arrivals

Seriously, go back and re do the chapters so that they are in paragraph form. It is like pulling teeth to read this story in its current format. Do not take this feedback lightly - we are all telling you this for your own benefit. Why go to all the trouble of writing a story that people can barely read just because the formatting is so problematic?

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 06:17 pm Title: Spiders

Loved the chapter! Looking forward to more!

Reviewer: samantha Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 05:41 pm Title: Spiders

omg hill i love it! its so much like what was going on a few months ago. its perfect! its so crazi how this story relates to real life. oh and i feel loved that im in here. not many people can say "hey i was in that story!" haha. welpz i better get goin so ill be ready for the game tonight. cant WAIT till the next chapter! uve got me hooked! see ya soon! lyl!

~*samantha*~

Reviewer: MarstersGirl13 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 05:39 pm Title: Spiders

cute, more soon please.

Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 05:14 pm Title: Spiders

glad she told him

Reviewer: frederique Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 04:49 pm Title: Setting the Stage

okay what 's gonna happen ?? i can't wait please update !!

Reviewer: frederique Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 08:49 am Title: Finding Lost Feelings

ahha love it !! please update !

Reviewer: PhotographyNut Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 07:20 am Title: Finding Lost Feelings

Great chapter! I hope she breaks up with Angel soon!

Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 02:29 am Title: Finding Lost Feelings

hope she breaks up with angel soon

Reviewer: xyz Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2006 - 12:43 am Title: Finding Lost Feelings

liking so far

Reviewer: DaniD Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 10:49 pm Title: Finding Lost Feelings

Awww..Willow is just so smart! I just KNEW that Willow was talking about Buffy glowing because of Spike and not Angel! I knew it before I got to that sentence. lol

Are you sure this is your first story, cause you are doing great..and thanx for the paragraph breaks..whew..much easier on the old peepers. :D
Looking forward to your next post!

Reviewer: Brat Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 10:11 pm Title: Finding Lost Feelings

woo boy! This should be interesting! lol I see a mess in the future . . .

Reviewer: Mariana Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 09:14 pm Title: Finding Lost Feelings

wonder what buffy is going to do about it...and how angel is going to react...i bet it's not going to be pretty ;) great chapter!! can't wait for more!! thanx

Reviewer: MarstersGirl13 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2006 - 09:11 pm Title: Finding Lost Feelings

awesome more soon!!=]

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