
Date: 12/30/2004 - 10:16 am Title: Serenity is far away
In regard to shippy's comment about dismissing my review, calling it a "bad review", if Shippy had actually, you know, looked closer, i didn't insult your writing or your story. In fact, i very much enjoy your story and what you have done with everything. Especially Willow's callousness and the tender way you are portraying Spike and Buffy. HOWEVER, in my original review, what i DID criticize were your author's notes, wherein you deemed yourself doing a better job than the ME writers., repeatedly and how i felt that was arrogant and rude to the writers that created the very characters that we so enjoy playing with. I do hope that you recognized what i actually SAID and didn't puff up and flit about like some other people. I look forward to what is to come and for any reason, since i didn't sign in, you would like to contact me, my email is albie27@gmail.com
Date: 12/30/2004 - 05:33 am Title: Serenity is far away
Spike and Buffy being Dawn's parents makes perfect sense! In fact I thought of a way that the Buffy sacrifice would work with that. The knife that was used to cut Dawn was first used to cut Spike. His blood on the knife mixed with hers and kept the portal from opening full blast and Buffy's blood completed the genetic puzzle. I thought that they were going to do this in season 6 . I'm glad you've taken up the dropped plot line.
Date: 12/30/2004 - 03:47 am Title: Serenity is far away
Amazingly quick upating. Can't wait to see where you are going with all the left over dangly bits. Great story.
Date: 12/30/2004 - 01:36 am Title: Serenity is far away
Disregard Albie's review entirely. Season 6 although very good in many ways should have been a lot better. I also believe that Dawn's origins should have been dealt with. Dawn's blue eyes and cheek bones make her a possible child of Spike's. I loved the 'crumbs' and can't wait for more. And please don't let a bad review get you down. You're worth exactly what you're saying and more.
Date: 12/30/2004 - 01:33 am Title: Serenity is far away
Great chapter!!! You are amazing.
Date: 12/30/2004 - 01:28 am Title: Serenity is far away
I'm continuing to enjoy this story very much and love the directions in which you're taking all the characters in your own S6. I do enjoy reading your Notes and your thoughts about the actual S6. ;) Thanks!
Date: 12/30/2004 - 01:07 am Title: Serenity is far away
I'm really enjoying your story, i love your spins and I do appreciate what you've done with Buffy's resurrection, as well as Willow's lack of understanding and hunger for power. That being said, something i find glaring in almost every single chapter is your author's note. Being that in every single entry, you disparage the ME writers and choices and how you feel you can do it better. i think it's rather arrogant of you to thrust that much importance upon yourself and your writing to even compare yourself to these writers. Was i thrilled with every choice or episode ME penned? No, but i would not think myself so much better if i had been writing for the show. I am thankful and in deep admiration of season 6, as well as all the others of this brilliant, original show. I enjoy fanfiction because it does give me spins i would have enjoyed, however, i do not think a story i enjoy more made the "right" choice or even the "better" choice. One is canon and one is fanon, and i find that the former demands much more respect. Now again, i really am enjoying this fic, and i do think you are a talented writer, but i do think the writers deserve the respect simply by creating the characters and universes that you are playing with right here.
Date: 12/29/2004 - 11:19 pm Title: Serenity is far away
So fucking beautiful. You took a very memorable moment from season 5 and brought it to fruition just like I always dreamed of seeing it on the show. Bless you. This was exactly how I wanted to see them come together and more. I was flat out crying when she whispered "crumbs". I can't tell you how gratifying it is to see everything I ever wanted to occur during season 6 in your incredible words. It is a crying shame that you were not working for Joss instead of Marti. I would pay just about anything to see your version of these events on the small or big screen. This chapter grabbed me at Dawn's study of the 2 photos and wouldn't let go. Fabulous follow-up on Dawn's birth lineage plotline. We all (and I mean viewers) could see the blatantly obvious resemblance between Dawn and Spike. The link between Buffy and Spike, from season 5 on, was never just intense UST. It was tangible in the form of Dawn. Whether fans want to admit it or not, she brought them together - fighting together for the same cause. Only something as powerful as blood could weaken the walls Buffy had built around her heart and allow Spike in her life. That's how she's built. I hated that the writers on BtVS dropped the storyline of Dawn's history as the key and her parentage. They disclose that Dawn was made from Buffy in 'The Gift', and yet they never significantly mention it again. Very sloppy. Dawn's character was used to build ratings and serve as a plot device season 5 and then essentially discarded. I felt very cheated after season 5, because I had developed an emotional attachment to Dawn and wanted to see her character grow. I'm so happy you are investing some serious time on her character in this fic. I'm also happy that you are allowing Buffy to be as vulnerable as she is right now. I think Buffy having a panic attack is perfectly natural for the emotional state she's in right now. And I believe her crying jags are natural as well. She spent untold amount of time in a loving, peaceful heavenly dimension only to be thrust into her constricting grave in the blink of an eye. It wouldn't surprise me if she suffered from some mild PTSD down the line. I have always believed that she could have benefited from some professional counseling post-resurrection. Her mother died, she died, and she was resurrected - three MAJOR life stress events. It's a blessing that Spike is the only one there with Buffy and is allowing her to just feel. I love that you linked the "rejection" of Buffy from heaven to her rejection at the hands of Riley. Such a natural progression of beliefs for the emotionally heightened state she's in. Everything was just pitch perfect in this chapter. And the kissing/grinding wasn't half bad either *wink, wink*. Very sexy, very intimate, very...*sigh* I cannot wait to see your interpretation of the look on Spike's face after his revelation about the "crumbs" Buffy has just given him.
Date: 12/29/2004 - 09:45 pm Title: Serenity is far away
Hot and moveing - now there is a combination, Loved it! The whole chapter rocked. I love the idea of Dawn coming from both Buffy and Spike. Such a cool avenue for exploration. And the ups and downs of Buffy's emotions rings so true for me. These are the types of plotlines and moments I wish could've been explored.
Date: 12/29/2004 - 09:16 pm Title: Serenity is far away
yummy. I too always wondered about Dawn's parentage. She looks like Spike and she acted like him. Love where you are going with the story. Don'y wait too long to update. :)
Date: 12/29/2004 - 08:33 pm Title: Serenity is far away
OH MY GODDESS!!!!!!...you are killing me this is unbelievable...that kiss is going to blow my socks off and then if it goes farther oh dear me oh my....again i say tantric....Ohhh i hope willow goes to a pyschic and gets her reading..gets what is coming to her and...ohhhhhhh the pleasure that will be to read....I just am jumping out my skin here just WOW....just bloody WOW
Date: 12/29/2004 - 08:20 pm Title: Serenity is far away
aaahhhh.....yet another fabulous chapter. so dawn is finally starting to "see". i am looking forward to seeing where you take this. doing right by buffy and spike hun.....doing them the justice they deserve.....please don't wait to long to post more
Date: 12/29/2004 - 07:53 pm Title: Serenity is far away
Yay! Amazing like every other chapter! Wondering where Willow is going to end up! Rack? Hmm.... And Dawn with the wondering about her heritage. Never understood how they could expect us too believe she was only made out of Buffy, what with the completly different looks and such... Hoping for more soon :-)
Date: 12/29/2004 - 05:38 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
The Spuffyness at the begin, the description - it was lovely! Just wondering what pictures this are that Dawn has.
Date: 12/29/2004 - 10:11 am Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
This story rocks!!!! I love it!!! It is definitely one of the best sotries I've read on this site. I like how you give insight to each character. Keep up the great work!!
Date: 12/29/2004 - 09:50 am Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
Like most people reviewing here I wish you'd written Season 6. This is so well written, so perfect, there is no word. More please.
Date: 12/28/2004 - 11:34 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
another great chapter. Please update soon and often Love this story.
Date: 12/28/2004 - 11:27 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
Awesome! I love how a real transformation is happening to Buffy as a result of her death and resurrection. That she is beginning to really question the people in her life, taking a step back and looking from another perspective. And even better that she is starting with herself and especially Spike. Hopefully this will transfer to others. And what is Dawnie up to? That was an intriguing last couple of lines.
Date: 12/28/2004 - 09:53 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
i was so absorbed in the chapter that i didn't realize it was finished and when i did..........UGH.........well i wonder what the picture is dawn is looking at? and why? an old book maybe? i can not wait to find out..........thanx for leaving me with a cliff hanger........LOL another engrossing, and well written chapter......my hat is off to you
Date: 12/28/2004 - 09:51 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
What is Dawnie looking at? Anyway...loved the closeness, the intimacy of this chapter. It was very relaxed, easy, and sincere. I'm so glad you are giving Buffy and Spike this time together for them both to heal. I'm relieved that Buffy woke up with the memory (and not denial) of her revelation the previous night. And the fact that she admitted, at least to herself, that she *liked* Spike was perfect. I love how you are showing the natural progression of her feelings. I also love how you are giving Spike some wonderful happy moments. Like you, I didn't understand the direction that Marti chose to take with season 6. I'm so glad you are writing your version to fix some of those inconsistencies. The quietness of this chapter was absolutely perfect for Buffy's current state of mind. If only she could have about 2 more months of this, gradually acclimating to her surroundings and social circle. I have no problem with Buffy not fighting right away. She is owed a much deserved break. Healing, not slaying, should be her goal. And if some kisses with Spike are included with that, all the better...right? On a side note...Willow leaving the house without even checking on Buffy? COLD. It is as if she has lost complete touch with her superego, just fulfilling the id (with ocassional necessary flashes of ego to keep her butt out of trouble). And not being "happy" that Tara and Dawn had gone to the beach? She is trying to control everything in her environment to the point of extremity. Very, very scary. I'm glad Tara decided to talk to Spike about this. I'm hopeful they will involve Giles, and ask him if there is anything they can do to neutralize Willow's power.
Date: 12/28/2004 - 09:02 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
I simply can't tell you how much better I like your version of the events after the end of S5, than what happened in the show. Can only agree to what you mentioned in your authors-note. They really seemed to forgett about their own plot sometimes! Really amazing stuff you're writing here. Can't wait for the next update!
Date: 12/28/2004 - 08:36 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
Loved the quotes and well i love that song too says so much...I hope that Tara is brave and does not give an inch to Willow for what she did...As for buffy and Spike I do believe this is the beginning of a beautiufl relationship to where ever it may lead....You write with such heart that carries anyone who reads it with the emotions and scenes you are conviening to the audience...thank you for that because that is what a good writer does sends you off to a world to feel,experience,and see the painting on the page...They say a picture is worth a thousand words....well if you were a painter the words you write will have them talking into many lifetimes...keep the wonderful story going...
Date: 12/28/2004 - 08:10 pm Title: Crystalline knowledge of you
Great chapter!! I complete agree with you on the season six of Buffy. They just expected her to jump right into the swing of things. It was like they didn't give her anytime to adjust to being alive again. I love your story. Your story is the way season six should have been. Keep up the good work.
Date: 12/28/2004 - 06:25 pm Title: Hireath
I was directed to your stroy just trhe other day and have devoured these 18 chapters. I am axiously awaiting more. Soon. Please?
Date: 12/28/2004 - 12:16 am Title: Hireath
just a quick review before i slide into dreamland...absolutely the sexiest, most intense moment i have read in a VERY long time. the vulnerability of the moment preceding it only heightened the emotional (and physical) impact of the scene between Buffy and Spike. just wow. i could feel Spike's breaths across the crown of my head. i could feel the dampness of Spike's t-shirt. just incredible imagery. i cannot stress that enough. you excel in the ability to place a reader in the scene you are creating. i am continually impressed, also, by your characterization. Tara changing her mind in the middle of the night is such a thing she would do. at this point and time, with her hope still intact, Tara would do the kind, selfless thing and get into bed with Willow even if she wasn't comfortable. i'm so glad that Dawn woke up and offered Tara her bed. i hated that Tara remained so much of an outsider of the Scoobies even in season 6 of BtVS. this simple act of sleeping in Dawn's bed, rather than the couch downstairs, can only reinforce the bond that Tara has already built with Dawn (and with Spike). if anyone should leave the house, it is Willow not Tara. wonderful, incredible revelations in this chapter. often times the biggest revelations come when you least expect them. i love the continual theme you have running through every chapter, of Spike being 'Protector', offering safety. i see this as being very instrumental in the unfolding of events to come. and i eagerly look forward to seeing Spike fulfill his potential as protector.