Date: 10/08/2005 - 08:07 am Title: Chapter 3
Oh my.. Spike was there on time, huh? So Buffy is having her baby right now. If they will be together in the future it's good that Spike was there - it will make his relationship with the baby even more special. :)
Date: 10/08/2005 - 12:50 am Title: Chapter 3
Awww... :( Poor Spike. . . Will Angel make an appearance?
Date: 10/07/2005 - 07:48 pm Title: Chapter 3
this story is really great and you're doing an awesome job so far, don't let anyone tell you otherwise. can't wait for more!
Date: 10/07/2005 - 03:46 pm Title: Chapter 3
I have repeatedly suggested that you get a beta for your grammar!! You are horrible at using present and past tense in the same sentence! For example "who has been quiet since he noticed her there." Do you see what is wrong with that sentence? You use has (present tense) with noticed (past tense). These are simple grammatical mistakes that a beta would catch. I know you think you are a good writer, and your storytelling is fine...but, please get a beta! It draws away from your stories when these errors jump off of the page. Seriously.