Date: 09/27/2018 - 11:05 am Title: Chapter 2.
you should finish
Date: 12/23/2011 - 03:04 am Title: Chapter 2.
Keep it coming! It's great so far
Date: 01/05/2006 - 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 2.
you know, if could slap Kiara, i honestly would. grr....great chapter! keep it up!
Date: 01/04/2006 - 12:17 pm Title: Chapter 2.
I read and well, I begin to wonder a LOT of things... I don't Spike is an ass, and especially after what you said in a previous review, I think there could be 2 options: 1: Spike has lost his brain somewhere and has not still found it, what I thought in first place seeing him "in love" with Kiara, and seeing the "girl" (impolite word in the next sentence) in question. Yes, it could fit, but... too simple? 2: there is another reason. Because, to marry Kiara... instead of Buffy! Don't want to seem rude but... the girl is a bitch. And worse, an arrogant, stupid and little bitch. Dru, for example, is a bitch but well, let's admit it, a queen in her category. The best in the worst. So, WHY??? So I wait, head full of questions ;)!
Date: 01/04/2006 - 08:52 am Title: Chapter 2.
I have a feeling that this story is just really, really underdeveloped. There are so many plotholes. Like when Spike asked Buffy if he could come over, she just said yes. That really makes for a weak story because it's like you're just trying to find any possible way for them to get together instead of tailoring a story to that. I mean, I just can't imagine anyone who would say yes to that and so far, I haven't seen an explanation of why Buffy's so submissive. A high esteemed human being just wouldn't do that. I don't know what you're leading up to with this but I think you need to straighten out your plot and I think you need to define your characters more. Don't get me wrong, I like angst, it's my favorite genre but this is just not good...
Date: 01/04/2006 - 02:47 am Title: Chapter 2.
great update
Date: 01/04/2006 - 01:18 am Title: Chapter 2.
Spike does need to fix things, but I really like this so far, keep up the good work.
Date: 01/03/2006 - 11:37 pm Title: Chapter 2.
The actual story is interesting..and I love angsy stories...it's just so hard reading Spike's character like this! I mean, he's and ass for doing what he's doing to both Kiara AND Buffy..
You did a pretty darn good job of making me dislike Kiara..what a b**ch! ...but it still doesn't excuse Buffy and Spike for having an affair.
I'm interested to see how in the world you are going to redeem these characters and make them more likeable..(mostly Spike) if in fact you plan on doing that ..
Keep going..and I'll keep an eye out for your next update ; )
Date: 01/03/2006 - 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 2.
Sorry I hate leaing negative reviews but god this story is awful...what the hell...are we supposed to feel sorry for Spike..OH PLEASE...and Buffy as the worst victim ever...please tell me this gets a little better, because I cant read anymore of this abusive stuff...
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, but no i'm not saying Buffy is the victim. In fact Buffy isn't the victim Kiara is.. it just hasn't come out yet, due to the fact that this is the second chapter. I'm sorry if you find this story abusive but i'am gonna keep on going with it untill it is finished, No reason at all should you feel sorry for Spike yes i did make Spike act like his the one hurt. I have reasons for it they just havent come out yet. they will sometime farther into the story, Thanks though for the flame they help me alot and i hope you do continue to read this fic but if you dont then thanks anyways,
but some people do like these kinds of fics. sorry that you're not liken it so far I'lll try harder.
Date: 12/25/2005 - 01:27 pm Title: chapter one
i like it, you're good. keep it up.
Author's Response: Thanks, but alot of the credit gose to my beta. Shes amazing but im glad that you're enjoying the story.
Date: 12/25/2005 - 02:23 am Title: chapter one
oh, this is gonna be so good. can't wait for more. loved it. great job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 12/24/2005 - 11:34 pm Title: chapter one
great story
Author's Response: thanks :) I'm glad you like it.
Date: 12/24/2005 - 10:32 pm Title: chapter one
This is not a flame but I think you need to correct the obvious typos in this. The indentions also make the post difficult to read. There seems to be no difference from your narration to her thoughts so I think you might need to correct that also.
Author's Response: I'll explain this one out, my microsoft isn't working at the moment so I have a beta helping me out. Even though this is no excuse for my typos, I'am sorry about that.,and i will try to do a better job for you. Thanks so much for the review