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Reviewer: MarstersGirl13 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2006 - 07:08 pm Title: Teacher of the year

its pretty good so far. but why does spike sound so irish?

Author's Response: Sorry, I didn't realize I used "Me" I'll correct those!! Thank you!!

Reviewer: Mac 1 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2006 - 04:58 pm Title: Teacher of the year

Two things: First, please space between paragraphs, including dialogue. Its harder to read when the lines squish together. Second, When writing dialogue between two people you don't have to continually write, 'Spike said', 'Buffy said', 'Spike replied', Buffy asked', etc etc. We already know who is speaking as long as there are no other people speaking or the dialogue moves back and forth between them in an uninterrupted sequence. Fix those things and write some more and I'll come back and see how the story shapes up. Good luck!

Author's Response: Ok I will space the story out more, Ok i'll stop wilth the whole buffy said spike said, Thank you for the review it really means a lot to me!!

Reviewer: Meagan Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2006 - 02:18 pm Title: Teacher of the year

Interesting story so far...can't quite figure out where all the angst will come from and that rarely is the case with most stories. I am defintly looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you, I like stories that have a little mystery!!

Reviewer: Stine Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2006 - 10:53 am Title: Teacher of the year

How old are Buffy and Spike exactly?!

Author's Response: Buffy is 26 and Spike is 27, I'll be explaining that a little later in the story.

Reviewer: SarahandJamesFanatic Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2006 - 03:49 am Title: Teacher of the year

great so far

Author's Response: Thank you!! This is my first and I'm really trying to make it a good story!!!

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