This story has a lot of good points. The plot and basic story are good, but there are a number of inconsistencies and writing and grammatical mistakes that would be helped with a Beta review. For instance - you said when Spike was held prisoner that only W&H could release him from his chains because of a spell on them, but this didn't deter the rescue team in any way - what happened? There were a few things like that in the story that seemed to detract from the storyline. There were other things like referring to "the Immortal" as just "Immortal" that were distracting to read. A little polish would make this a much stronger story. I really liked some aspects of the story and your ideas, but got somewhat frustrated reading parts of it.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your feedback. I appreciate your honest criticism. It really helps me to improve in the future. And to the questions you asked... I meant to mean that the chains were magically bound and cannot be broken by the prisoner (Spike) himself. Maybe I didn't explain it properly. And the Immortal vs Immortal thing was a mistake on my behalf. It was not intentional. I would have really used a beta for my story but the two betas I had contact with disappeared after chapter 6. And I didn't want the readers to wait for me to find a beta. So I released the stories. If someone offers to beta it for me, I would resubmit it again. I do understand your frustration as I do get frustrated myself like that when reading some stories. I'll try to be more consistent in my future storylines. In your opinion, should I write a sequel?

yes a sequal is in order
i absolutly love this story as it doesnt have that fake air about it
i like it because it seems like joss wrote it

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. That was what I was aiming for and your review made me feel like I achieved it. Add me into your favourite authors if you are interested in receiving alerts about my upcoming stories. I have a few WIP for the moment.

You should do a sequal I loved the story and would love to read more

Author's Response: Writing a few other stories now. Once done with them, I will get back to this to follow up on a sequel. Please find a moment of your time to read my other stories and leave reviews.

Absolutely loved this fic! Would love a sequel!

Author's Response: I'm motivated for a sequel too. Need to think of more plots to go with it. However, I have other ideas that are WIP at the moment. Add me into your favourite authors and you will be alerted once I add a new story. Thank you for the constant support.

very cool. spike and buffy deserve there happy ending. glad angel got one too.

Author's Response: I'm happy how it turned out too. I don't have anything against angel although I find him doing the tortured soul too bland. I just like him as long as he doesn't interfere with Spuffy. :D

I LOVED IT! I LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT LOOOOOOOOOOVED IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the enthusiastic response. :)

Author's Response: PS: Please find a moment of your time to start reading the other story I have started to write and leave reviews. Always welcome your positive response.